Wasn't this supposed to show apparitions of the future? Why would there be a past apparition here?

Here is what we call, a plot-hole. I think you should probably delete this scene or find a way to make it known that Voldy was Tom Marvolo Riddle...

-P. B-Fish

There are mistakes that I think I covered from the last two chapters.

By the way, 'isle' relates to small islands. The correct word you are looking for is a homophone - AISLE. Just need to add an A before 'isle'.

'his look alike' should also be, 'his look a like.' Or even, 'his look-a-like'. I prefer the latter myself. Alike and a like basically have the same meanings but there is a difference. Like is replaceable to 'similar to.' Alike is being similar.

Ex.

"Harry was like a doll."

"Harry and the doll were alike."

"...the middle persons eyes". 'Persons' should not be used here. Instead, there should be an apostrophe between the n and s so it becomes, 'person's'.

Another common mistake: Loose and lose. "We can’t loose to Slytherin" should actually replace the word 'loose' with 'lose'. Again, I don't know if this was intentional or if you just didn't catch that.

"...who looked exactly like James-almost." You need to put a space between James and almost, or else it will look like the same word. This has happened a few times, but I won't bore you with listing all of them.

If you're talking about something relating to James, then you should put an apostrophe after the name since there is an s at the end already. Just thought you should know.

Another reminder:

were - is past tense of 'be'. "Where were you?"

we're - contradiction for we are. Present tense. "

"All were doing is sticking beside you through tough and thin" Do you mean 'thick and thin'?

Remember that this is set in Scotland, most of these people are going to be British so you will need to get yourself updated on British slang. 'ass' would become 'arse'.

Death Eaters also must be capitalized...And the Department of Mysteries.

"...was imitating from him..." The definition if 'imitate' is to pretend, to impersonate. I think you need to find a new word for that...

-P. Babble-Fish

I really like the last part. The twelve year old 'James Potter' is Harry, I presume? :) I'm excited to see that they see him finally.

Anyway, this chapter also has quite a lot of mistakes. I recommend you to go back and read after writing, ask a friend to read it to see if they spot any mistakes, or sleep on it then come back to see if you can spot your mistakes. I find that a fresh mind helps me think better.

A beta reader is like an editor of sorts. They will tell you what they think needs to be fixed and stuff. I haven't actually written any fanfiction, but I'm a pretty good editor? I would be willing to help you out...Please reply to this if you're interested and I'll give you my contact.

You forgot to capitalize some words again. 'Quidditch' is spelled with two 'd's, just to point that out. Do you have spell-checker?

If I'm not mistaken, I think 'Marauder' also needs to be capitalized as it relates to a title (to James, I mean). 'Ya' should also be 'yeah', unless you want them to sound like some preppy school-girls or something. You also misspelled apparition.

I think you might be typing too fast when you're writing this, because there are still some silly mistakes. The 'r' in from should be BEFORE the o, not after it.

Here's something you should note:

Your - As in belonging to or related to you. "I'm sure with your...experience, you should be able to make your way around on time."

You're - is a contradiction of you are. Related to what you are doing. "You're not going to the movies!"

See the difference?

I also have a question about letting the students know. A few of Voldy's minions would be among them so would that give the Order a disadvantage?

'A scared shiver went through the crowd of magicians there.' This sentence feels somewhat weird. Perhaps you should reword it different? "A shiver of fear went through the crowd of magicians."

'And when the middle figure lifted his head. The hall gasped.' Take out the period from between 'head' and 'the'. Unless you replace the word 'when' with 'then'.

Anyway, there are some places where you forgot to put commas here and there. I apologize that this is so long. '

-P. B-Fish

This is a very interesting idea but you have quite a few mistakes.

'Potter' should be capitalized as it is a surname. I don't know if this was unintentional, but I think I should point that out because it happens, at least two times.

Another thing that is bothering me: You're supposed to type out every number that is below ten. For instance :

"They were newly wedded of about 2 months. Lily was 1 month pregnant, although nobody knew yet, it was a surprise." Instead of that, it should be formatted as :

"They were newly wedded of about two months. Lily was one month pregnant, although nobody knew yet, it was a surprise."

This is a mistake that fanfic writers tend to make. Any number that is above ten can be written in numerals, but below always has to be written out. I don't know why this is the case, but I guess it's just because it looks better that way.

Hm, I think you should take the time to go back to edit this. You need to add some commas on some parts, and you have forgotten to capitalize Lily's name in one sentence, plus add a few more details in.

Other than that, I am absolutely love with the idea of this story. This hasn't been updated in about four years, have you dropped this? Please don't!

omg I loved it can't wait for you to update

It's a great story, and I love the fact that it's a very uniqe story with James and Lily to-be-parents and then they get to meet the future Harry. Very interesting indeed, it's sad that you haven't updated in four years... this story has got so much potential :] I hope you're doing well IRL and that things are not a disaster.

Huggles,

Mi

I really loved this story it kept me on the tips of my toes. I really can't wait to read what will happen next. Please update really soon.

This is a great story! I really like it. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Please continue :]

...I really think you should update. Because Now that we have not-so-dead-anymore Sirius with his Godson, I really want to know what will happen! Continuing this story would be lovely. (:

OMG! YOU HAVE TO UPDATE! This story is so good.

This is good. Continue.

-Kath

I hope you continue this story. It is very good, I hope you haven't given up on writing this. Anyways I hope you update they story. It is very good. Later.

gw

Odd little fic here but I like it. Keep it up.

It's really great so far. -