I think the selections for the academic team were pretty off. There were 2 5th years, when there were several older students who would definitely know more (atleast Terry and Susan). And what is up with Ginerva being in everything?

Sorry if I'm being a bit mean, but I'm not a fan of Ginny 'fangirl' Weasley.

Nice story so far. I wanted to know more about his training and abilities which you kind of skimmed over. The promise of new types of magic is interesting, and I hope that you develop that. The plot of the challenge from Durmstrang is also promising. Reading on now...

WANT TO COMMEND YOU ON A JOB WELL DONE WITH THIS STORY. MAYBE IN THE FUTURE YOU WILL DO ANOTHER COMPANION PIECE TO THIS STORY.

Quite a nice piece of work. I like the manipulative Dumbledore, because you make it seem more like he wants to control and that he believes that he is doing the right thing. That's a good part of the plot. I don't really believe in the cliche of the all the magical races having some sort of governing body. I think it's a bit of an odd assumption. I like you eventually had Harry reconnect with Luna, Neville and Hermione. I think that Luna and Neville betraying Harry was a bit odd and way out of character, but overall it was good. One grammar thing though, it should be:

Harry said, "Hello."

or

"Hello," said Harry.

NOT

Harry said "Hello."

i know it really doesnt matter at this point but i say harry hateing the world

I completly agree, all hell is about to break loose, i hope that Harry kicks everyones butt. by the way love the story so far. :)

Bravo...or Brava as the case may be. Even in the first book I wondered about Molly not knowing where platform 9-3/4 was, and using the word 'muggle.'

I have said this to many people...lol, so I'm not just rying to butter you up.

This is hands down one of the best stories I've read on here!

I love a powerful Harry :)

I would love for you to write another story.

your story is good however you really need to work on your past and present tense, like "has happened" should be had happened. If your story is written in a way that things have already happened then you need to write it as such, other than that your story was very good.

This was a bloody awesome story...well done.

:)

Hi!

I just wanted to say that I found the plot of this story to be really good and not as clichéd as some stories where Harry learns in the beginning how he's been betrayed (even if some of those are good too). I think it has a lot of depth.

The only negative thing I have to say is that your grammar is not quite up to par with your plot-ability (especially concerning tempus) and your sentence structure could get a bit better.

That said, I think this is a very good story overall!

Sincerely,

LoonyLinday

this is a top quality story. good job

dhocking actions

nice job so far. its good

great story