|Reviews for The Rohan Pride Chronicles, Part I: Alone|
| Anatone chapter 3 . 1/3/2009
i like the dream sequence. it really gives you a look into what matters most in Guthwyn's life.
i didn't notice any mistakes, so good job. :)
| Anatone chapter 2 . 1/2/2009
wonderful.I did think the part where Eowyn and then Eomer and the Guthwyn were shot was rather cheesily done, but as there's not enough cheese in life, i'm fine with it,
Mistakes I found:
- when you write this: sheathe, it shouldn't have an e at the end. i could be wrong, but that's the way i've always seen it done
| Anatone chapter 1 . 1/2/2009
Very interesting idea. I like the bond Theodred had with Guthwyn;it's very touching. The chasing scene was hilarious, especially when the guards timed them. I love how you add normality to Tolkien's rather dry world.
Mistakes I found:
- you wrote "Your welcome" once
| CrayonMentality chapter 71 . 5/30/2008
What a fabulous story, I'm so pleased it turned out well and I took the time to read it. Fantastic.
| CrayonMentality chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
Oh. Wow. That's all I can say. I'm so, so, so glad that I decided to read this. It's amazing, breathtaking and wholly engaging. Thanks so much for writing.
"Éomer would come to her rescue just in the nick of time, darting past the demon and picking her up before the creature knew what was happening."
That was the cutest thing ever, it really made me laugh.
So even if I completely despise the rest of the story by some strange phenomona it will be worth it merely for the prologue. Which is completely awesome.
Eek, I can't wait to read the rest. Damn exams taking up my time.
| Olivia chapter 71 . 2/15/2008
This is an absolutely amazing story! It was such a journey from the prologue to the last chapter. It was long, true, but you spent enough time developing the plot and the characters without going into a lot of minute detail as in Tolkien's Fellowship of the Ring, and I felt like when Guthwyn remembered her childhood and years in Isengard it seemed like a distant memory for me as well as her.
It was slow at some parts, but it didn't stop me from continuing to read, especially as you had some great cliffhangers at the end of chapters! The climax was really exciting too. I have been staying up late at night when I should be sleeping because I wanted to keep reading this beautiful story!
I loved how much personality you put into your characters. I fell in love with them and was very emotional when some of them met sad fates.
Finally, I love Guthwyn. She is such a strong and inspiring character, and it is amazing what she has been through and survived. That might sound kind of cheesy, but I really do find strength in the terrible circumstances that Guthwyn has survived.
Also (sorry!), I did notice a few typographical errors, but they were few and far between and did not detract from the superior quality of the writing. I didn't notice any grammatical mistakes at all, as I recall.
So excited to read the next installment,
| NotAfraidToLive chapter 71 . 12/13/2007
i just read this story. i must say that it is DEFINATLY the BEST story i've EVER read. no joke. it's amazing. truely and completely amazing. it seriously couldnt be better. I LOVE IT! i can't wait to start reading part two!
| Dissolved Starr chapter 71 . 6/26/2007
Wow! This was totally amazing, i just couldn't stop reading. Your characers are just so rich and alive i felt for sure i was actually there admist them. Im off to read part two now!
| azure-530 chapter 23 . 3/28/2007
I just found your story and it's fantastic! It is so hard to find a story with such a great deal of story and character development. Your description of the scenes and how Guthwyn feels is evident throughout the story and makes for a more enjoyable read.
| angie chapter 1 . 1/8/2007
I just have to say one thing... you deserve 10 reviews. The quality of the writing is enough to offset any squeamishness your readers will feel. Seriously, you have real talent. Oh yeah, sorry, I have actually read this part of the story and am currently waiting eagerly for the next installment of the epilogue. I Love you for being so dedicated and quick to write chapters.
| hersheykisses01 chapter 1 . 6/24/2006
I didn't read your story (sorry), I just noticed it because you've written 70-something chapters, and that is amazing! WOW! I don't really have time to read your whole story, but I really commend you on writing so much. I'm sure it is a beautiful, well-written story.
| coolmarauders chapter 1 . 6/9/2006
I haven't actually read the story, but seventy-one chapters can be very daunting to your readers.
| Callie chapter 70 . 3/9/2006
A painful death? Check! (Yay!)
Castration? Alas no.
Well, you can't have everything. Close enough.
Just one thing that's bugging me though. Aside from being a complete and utter loon, and do I mean that in the worst way possible, what is Haldor's motivation for exposing Guthwyn to the fellowship? I mean, isn't he supposed to be a servant to Sauron? And wouldn't Sauron be mightily pissed off if he found out about Haldor's actions? Not because of the welfare of some lowly slave, but because the actions in question hindered the search for the Ring. And he would find out, believe me. There is no way in hell he would let anyone, least of all a captured elf, (however sick and twisted he turned out to be in the end) leave Mordor unsupervised. Someone was bound to be tailing him. And after a thousand years of Sauron’s hospitality he would know and expect that. That said, I for one would not want a pised off Sauron after me. Ever. Then again, I'm not certifiable. At least that's what my friends tell me. So, that is the only issue I have with that chapter.
Aside from that, your characterization of Aragorn blew me away. I think you managed to capture exactly what makes his character so compelling. The burden he carries is nothing to scoff at and I do think it would make him seem hard, even scary at times. His reaction to Guthwyn was dead on. He is bound to be extremely suspicious of her for a long, long time. That is off course, if nothing unexpected happens. Again.
Well, that's enough of my ramblings for now.
Hope the second part gets posted soon. Say, is there any way to persuade you to post all ten chapters at the same time? :)
| IceDragoness1 chapter 70 . 3/8/2006
Very well written.
Looking forward to reading the second part!
| Orion'slover chapter 69 . 3/8/2006
totally awesome, cant wait for more