Reviews for Virgin Lily
Me chapter 10 . 11/5/2016
Omg hun, you have an absolutely fab plot but your writing style, spelling and grammar are shit so they kinda ruin the story. Soz babe xx
Guest chapter 1 . 10/3/2015
x.SHABBY.x chapter 18 . 7/27/2015
Oh, USA...19yrs old
x.SHABBY.x chapter 15 . 7/27/2015
She forgave him that easily?
x.SHABBY.x chapter 10 . 7/27/2015
Now the Jealous James

love love love
x.SHABBY.x chapter 8 . 7/27/2015
I absolutely LOVE a protective James Potter.
x.SHABBY.x chapter 4 . 7/27/2015
I really like this story :)

But I also agree with what others have said. Re-editing.
Just to fix a few grammar and spelling errors, but also add in a few more details in certain spots.

This fic could be gold!
I hope you consider it.
It's awesome!
UnBreakableFacade chapter 12 . 8/7/2014
I'm probably waaaayyyy toooo late with this beta thing. But I think your story has such great potential and if you re-uploaded your story after it's been edited you'd get heaps more viewers.
Let me know if you still want a Beta by pm ing me or u can email me on. hippocampi99 gmail. com (Just get rid of the spaces)
ribisan chapter 13 . 10/9/2013
story is not bad, but don't like the way lily is acting - like another James Potter fangirl! It's bit odd !
Invisiblegirl3 chapter 1 . 9/23/2013
Its Quaffle, and come on, its not like Peter was plotting their demise since he stepped into Hogwarts. He was their friend, thats what made the betrayal so horrible. Other than that, good start.
Diane Potter chapter 22 . 2/7/2012
Beautiful Story!
AlphaOmega314 chapter 22 . 1/12/2012
Awesome story :-)
Paige chapter 22 . 12/5/2011
The storyline is good but this needs to be re-edited. There is a fair amount of mistakes and sometimes things are too sudden. You need to lead into them. Otherwise I love it
Chia-Adamou chapter 1 . 6/25/2010

i reallu loved this chp, me and my mate were laughing like mad whne we read this chp, (my mate mysticrox123), lol, am goingto carry it on when i get home as am at schl now!,

my mate says that this remids her fo a boy she knows in our class !lol, thanks,

hope you get to check out my story's(well story, but i will have another one up soon!0 great !
Acci0 Malf0y chapter 3 . 11/4/2009
breast, gryffindor, transfiguration

i dont like this sentence fragment:

when she bumped into a tall blonde boy heading the opposed way, it was Malfoy!
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