I like the set up! its very real to how it might happen in life not some bullshit like t.v. theres so many overtones of high school life and coming to terms with what an average girl might deal characterazation is definitly alot of potentail in the clashing relationship with john and antoinette! so far Im hooked keep it coming!

Nice long chapter this time...you HAVE been busy.

Oh...I dig the classic vampiric 'I can't be near you or I might eat you' angst. Never gets old. Good emotions during that John/Nette confrontation.

I've always liked the idea of Rangers troubling themselves to deal with mundane crimes. The foiled bank robbery here is very nicely played. I like the depth you've added to the criminals...not anonymous 'bad guys' in ski masks, but actualy people with troubles and motives of their own. And the idea that they might actually sue Brad is intriguing.

Action scenes are pretty good here...I like the idea of explosive bullets. And I like that John's copying isn't always an exact match...the wolf-mask was a nice touch. Nice ending to that fight scene...although I somehow doubt that Giniz is actually dead.

Grammar glitches minimal...although the meanings of a few phrases elude me...'sought to cheese with their projectiles'...WTF? :P

The bounty hunter's appearance is a nice touch...and I like the acknowledgement of other worlds where the Rangers are called Rangers. Foreshadowing, are we? :P

"Ranger, Keeper…different dimension, same pain in the ass," Great line.

Now make with some more, Ms. Productive. So much to do...

Progress! Hooray!

Well...sorta. Kind of one of those two steps forward, one step back things, isn't it?

Oh, well.

Things flowed a little more smoothly this time through. Author's notes are gone now, I notice. It's interesting the way you glossed over certain scenes with the bold-text narrative...while I think we could have benefitted from seeing a few of those, most of it would have probably just taken up time. Besides, the narration does help the overall theme...that this is a legend, being related by some sort of storyteller. So all in all, a nice touch.

I'm still confused by the possible imagery of the monsters that threatened the parents. Was there any actual meaning to the forms that they took, or was that just made up as it went?

Also interesting to note that the Keepers can summon their weapons outside of Morph. Or was that just because they were trapped in some sort of dreamscape? Can they normally do that? Or did the appearance of the weapons symbolize their willingness to fight their darker sides?

I love it passion and love and emotion that connects to make all men cry.

“Pete, nothing would demoralize us more than if he killed them!”

Well, actually, if he kills them, he'll make matyrs, ensuring that the Keepers will fight that much harder...as long as they're alive, he can hold them over their heads...

Kinda strange that the White Keeper's weapon is part of the big combo-weapon, but Blue's isn't...seeing as White's supposed to be the extra.

The dialogue is great in this chapter...although it's a bit strange that people are more upset with John for cheating on Nette than they are with him for sleeping with a guy. I know, it makes more sense, but it's not how most people would actually react. 'Tis a homophobic world, alas.

I loved it! Keep me update!

*low whistle*

Okay, now THAT is gonna scare off the readers...The better a slash scene is, the more readers it scares off, and that was a good one.

Gotta say, I wasn't expecting Marc to be Giniz himself...maybe a monster or a minion, or hell, an actual Vampire. But not Giniz. He seemed just a little too good at impersonating humanity for someone who'd just been reincarnated.

Parents...you know, I always wondered why they only tried the parents bit that one time on the show, and then gave up...It's a good tactic. (Then again, I also wondered why the baddies never just sneak into the Rangers' houses at night and kill them in their sleep)

I guess the murder charges will be dropped...no corpse or anything. Then again, this isn't the srt of thing that's ver happened before, so I don't imagine there's any legislation in place for it yet.

Looking forward to more...

VERY nice chapter. It's been so long since your last update that I'd forgotten plot elements...but you already knew that.

I like that you're demonstrating your Rangers' powers and weapons here...You'd have thought that they'd know better than to morph in public. There's a reason superheroes have secret identities, and you've very deftly illustrated why in this chapter. All the subtle and not-so-subtle social angst was very well handled. I hadn't even thought about Rangers getting kicked off sparts teams, but you're right, it's exactly what would happen. I also like the further development of the Rangers' home lives...always a nice touch. Nice handling of details...especially in the description of John's house. I can smell that hovel from here...not sure if that's a good thing. :P

Marc is SO cute. Yay for slash!

Air? All the words in the english language that he could have used there, and he says AIR? EVIL! And EVIL you for leaving us all hanging there with no explanation as to WTF was going on there at the end...(sighs) And it'll be another six months before you update again. Damn.

Anyway. Great job. You're definitely improving...there are even fewer spelling and grammatical errors now than you used to have. Congrats on a job well done.

You're probably the first writer in PR history to take 8 chapters just to get to the morphing sequence. :P

I liked that you took us through the meditation with them, and the glimpses at the Ranger's home lives were a nice touch. As always, very intriguing plot.

You do still have that little problem of leaping from past to present tense and back mid-sentence. Might wanna work on that. It's the sort of little thing that can cut down an otherwise great story, and it's easily fixed by just getting yourself a beta reader.

Me again! Whassup?

This story's coming along pretty well. I still don't have a very good handle on any of the Rangers but Antionette, but I'm sure I'll get to know them eventually. Still loving the

'mysterious destiny' angle, and reincarnation's always a fun plot device. I like that the mentor has superiors who keep him in the dark about some things...it makes him a bit more real, knowing that he doesn't know everything.

Gotta ask...is there any actual pattern to this language, or are you making it up as you go?

I look forward to reading more...and wish that my Author Alert still worked. Dunno what's wrong with it...Anyway. Keep it up.

well i finally got around to reading ur story... It's good but where is Johnny? lol.

awesome start. keep writing... _ i want to read more and u better send me a signed copy when it's published :-p

OH YES I WANT MORE !

U put ur self in ur own story cool lol!

Like walking, metallic poison ivy...I definitely like the Haezoh. Utilizing the environment is always a good thing to have characters do durng fight scenes...far too many authors just have them whip out a bunch of specifically-named martial arts moves that no one without a black belt has a hope of recognizing.

I love it when the mentors actually do something productive. I do get the impression that that sword of his could easily hack up all twelve and spare them all the trouble, though. I wonder if he has a good reason for not doing so...giving them a change to get to know thier new abilities? Or testing them? Hmm.