|Reviews for And Wait for You to Breathe|
| JBubbles chapter 1 . 12/4/2008
Its interesting to see Zero as the Top... But the story, yes is kind of slow, but I'm liking it.
| silvermyth chapter 1 . 1/15/2005
Hm...not a bad start. Saw a couple grammatical/mechanical errors...don't think I saw any spelling errors, though.
This isn't the most interesting thing I've read lately, but it's not too bad. I'd say mostly...try to use a little less dialogue. And be a little less...I don't know, something about your writing seems to be lacking. Read through it again, see if YOU like the story. Try to add more substance to the story.
I'm sorry if I'm giving you a harsh criticism. ; I just get so tired of reading some of the stuff people put on , and I feel I need to do my part to help them improve.
Well, I wish you good luck in continuing and/or revising this. _
| HeavenGoddess chapter 1 . 1/1/2005
lololololololololol. you must continue. Zero is thick-headed. I love this story. Continue please! and soon!
| Luna chapter 1 . 12/31/2004
This is really good.