|Reviews for Earl of the North|
| bellamort chapter 50 . 10/19/2021
Wondrous work! I loved the thrilling roller coaster ride you took us on with this master piece. Please, keep up the amazing work; you are most talented! I wish you a happy day and a bright future! :)
| LoneNoble chapter 17 . 10/14/2021
this is as far as i got before the story grew stale for me. im sure some people liked it but it wasn't to my tastes, i found the romance and plot both lacking.
Harry doesn't act in a way that makes sense really for what he's been through, there's no moment of adjustment to wealth, betrayal, political power, any of that. and given he's handed all those things and they're central to the plot I'd have perhaps wanted more time on him adjusting. also the money and status has been a bit of a deus ex machina, he hasnt had to struggle for anything at this point in the story, and whilst a power fantasy is totally fine, even they make the main villains a struggle, or at least give the hero some challenges.
the other thing is the romance, the timeline for it all is a bit wonky, and for a story with "romance" as a genre it takes a massive backseat. the events in askaban, presumably where they became friends or fell in love, was totally skipped, and that was if i recall, months of time. also the death of his only parent figure was fobbed off as "oh well" by harry. even bella made more sense, she noted her guilt and past actions, which is natural and makes sense, Harry's passive viewpoint, which as far as i can tell is "i love you so you can do no wrong" is naive and weak at best, and psychopathic and tyranixal at worst.
the concept of this story has a lot of potential. and it's definitely not an issue with your writing style, its solid and enjoyable. i just feel like this plot isn't being fully realized with its potential.
maybe itd get better if i read more, but its lost its hook. anyway i hope you find what I've said constructive
| Cam chapter 50 . 10/10/2021
When opening the door to Minervas office since she is Headmistress it would be the Headmistress office not the Headmasters office. Thought you should know that little mistake.
| Cam chapter 14 . 10/4/2021
Problem with this chapter
1. Azkaban is a prison not a castle.
| Steve Bonesteel chapter 1 . 10/3/2021
Sirius never died. He was stunned not killed. Even you admitted to it in your story. Bella said she stunned him not killed him. Going thru the viel stunned will not kill you. Going thru it alive will. Magic works inod ways. Oh and time onthe other side of the viel is slow. 20 years here is only 20 minutes there.
| Rune Tobor chapter 50 . 10/1/2021
I like it.
Thanks for writing.
| Rune Tobor chapter 34 . 9/30/2021
In the books Tom may have died but good lost.
Too many were killed when the Ministry folded.
Too many innocent people died.
The Malfoys lived...
Albus Dumbledore was a fool.
He should have demanded all death eaters tossed through the veil.
Misplaced mercy made the murder of thousands happen!
| Rune Tobor chapter 21 . 9/26/2021
Most of the wizzys do not deserve magic or freedom or life...
WIZARS FALL is my all time fav fic.
THE BRITISH REFORMATION is a very close second.
| Rune Tobor chapter 19 . 9/26/2021
I have another idea, I call Divine Nightmare.
Basically the gods are not happy with the projected future of the wizard world.
They send a Nightmare to various people as a warning.
When do they do this?
After 1945, when Albus defeats Gellert?
Before Voldemorts first war?
In time to save the Potters?
Before Harry goes to Hogwarts?
Who is the nightmare sent to?
That largely depends on when but how about Bellatrix before she becomes a death eater?
Lily, Regulus, Moody, Luna, pick your favorite.
| Rune Tobor chapter 16 . 9/26/2021
We have fics where a teenage Harry pairs with an older Bellatrix.
Time travel so Harry and Bellatrix are about the same age.
What is missing are fics where Harry or Bellatrix are from a different dimension.
Well completed ones anyway...
Most of all I want to see a Bellatrix vs Bellatrix fight!
| Rune Tobor chapter 4 . 9/26/2021
"Accidental" events happen to Harry quite often in the books.
I just had an idea for a Harry and Bellatrix fic!
Harry loses vs Voldy because Tom had more men, money, etc... plus Dumbledor is a fool and crippled Harry the way he treated him. (mentally and magically not physically)
Tom takes over the british wizzys then starts a world war, everybody dies.
Mother Magic or your favorite Goddess or Demon sends Bellatrix back in time.
Bellatrix is reborn as Harry's twin sister! Yes she gets to keep her memories.
This was inspired by ROUNDABOUT DESTINY.
| Rune Tobor chapter 3 . 9/26/2021
FemHarry is a trope that has been done many times.
But few of the other characters are ever gender flipped.
Would a female Albus have made the same mistakes?
And for all who seem to think Draco and Harry are the ONE TRUE PAIR why is it there are not more femDraco fic out there?
And for the AMBITIOUS, how would a female Tom Marvelo Riddle Jr. have turned out?
| Rune Tobor chapter 2 . 9/26/2021
I suppose you used Harry meets Bellatrix in Azkaban again in Delenda Est.
What I would like is a fic where James keeps the Cloak of Invisibility when they are hiding.
At the very least Lily should escape with Harry.
It would be nice if James lives too.
As for Voldy, the Potters run and leave a BIG BOMB that kills Tom.
| Rune Tobor chapter 1 . 9/26/2021
Re-reading this, I know I read it in 2012 because I left signed reviews.
Yes Delenda Est is better but this reads like the first Harry Potter book.
Also I refuse to read most Ron/Hermione, many Harry/Ginny, all Hermione/Draco and so forth.
There is ONE Harry/Draconica you can find it under [Harry,OC].
Harry in Azkaban? Well they threw Sirius there...
When in the books is there JUSTICE?
Death eaters plead imperius, Hagrid was no given a trial, Sirius was never exonerated, Harry's trial was a farce, Umbridge got away with torture, Draco and his parents should have been tossed in Azkaban after everything but were free...
THERE IS NO JUSTICE IN THE WIZZY WORLD!
I am here again because I favor revenge over redemption.
| rosemary62442 chapter 5 . 9/21/2021
I qonder what happened to the rest of the Weasleys? The twins were in the Order...