This story is so good

Great story! Personally, I believe this more realistic take on a Pitch Black sequel is the best Riddick fanfiction I've ever read. Nice job!

I particularly liked the early chapters as Jack as a kid. I think you captured those adolescent years going through puberty, struggling with changing shapes and identities well. Thanks for sharing.

this was a fun read. all of the plot was engaging and fairly believable. the riddick deal seems plausible and still carries the risk that someone might see him as expendable yet his expertise would probably make him a great trainer in various fields. I felt some of the Riddick dialogue was too sappy for him at times as I imagine him being more verbally stoic rather than expressive, I feel like he would just have this intensity and affection that would let her know. He loses badass points for being a sap. thank you for writing, sharing, and completing this wonderful tale.

Very nice. Love it.

Lovely!

Well done. Read the whole story in two days. Kept fighting sleep trying to get to the end. I haven’t done that in years. Wish this was the actual sequel.

That was a fun ride.
:D
Well done.

hhehe... I absolutely love the Cock Blocking Karina.
She's so damned cute.

hahaha... recruited... Fantastically done.

yep. that's about the right age for the awakening. :D

I AM!
I AM INTERESTED!
i LOVE THIS
I love it so much.
I want to read more. I want to follow it to the end, whenever that comes.
I'm on me way to the next chapter now. XD

best birds and bees talk ever...
XD

hehehe... nice.

the relationship is so well written that I feel it.
It makes so much sense to me. :D
Awesome Awesome!