Heh, nice addition. I don't really like how you handle the period issue, but apart from that, its all good.

Well done :)

It has been a long time since i found a Pitch Black fic that is well written and sucks me in. I love how you have kept the characters true to the movie, but also give them more depth and humanity.

PLEASE update soon

I loev the way you're writting this story! Keep it up!

Whoah! is Riddick starting to like Jack? he told her she was pretty, well... in his own way. How old is she now? what does she look like? is she still bald? hehe. "It's the winner of the look alike contest." - Paris

Poor Jack, she's got a bad history and messed up cycles. poor Jack? she's sleeping in the same bed with Riddick, that's lucky Jack!

Great chapter, i can't wait for the next. i really want to see where you take this story. well, til next time. buh-bye

WoW! awesome start. and this is a j/r fic! there are alot of those popping up now and i just makes me so giddy every time a new one comes out. i can tell this story is gonna rock. u have the characters down perfectly.

Riddick:'God isn't a bad thing, just an asshole. And sometimes, you want to have an asshole on your side.' i can totally visualize him saying that.

And Jackie girl, she's got a crush Riddick. Well she sure can pick'em. oh plz don't make her too ditzy. i just get so embarrased for her whenever she acts like that.

Nice intro. keep it up. buh-bye now!

Poor Jack.

More please.

Interesting - Jack killed the motherf* - good

Sounds like a real Riddick and Jack story to me -I ike that.

Update soon please

Nice story. You might want to consider a change of title though, Apprentice is the name of a very well-known PB fanfic about Jack and Riddick.

Man, I'm a sucker for post PB fics :D (Especially when Jack likes to sleep with Riddick) I love how both Imam and Riddick are teaching her things, even though she thinks she learns more from Riddick, it's probably good for Imam that he's getting to do his thing.

The tense change in the third to last chapter is a bit startling but it's minor. I look forward to more.

(And I'm just noticing this has the same title as Ardath Rekha's awesome epic. Hope this one is nice and long also.)

Nicely done, you stuck to the basic characters pretty well. I always did wonder why Jack pretended to be a guy. Anyway, keep writing, and I'll keep reading. VERY VERY GOOD!