Reviews for The Scorpion's Sting
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Smutley Do-Wrong chapter 6 . 10/27/2023
C4 Dunno if it quite fits the definition for "plot contrivance" " Shall I tell him about her and Wormtail? No, what's the use? It would just darken his mood…" Well, consistent with her not telling Dumbledore EITHER.

C6
The teachers in school had never considered Dementors a real danger, and had treated the subject in a rather theoratical way; and so she could not remember, apart from thinking happy thoughts, what defences would work against them. She raised her wand and used the first spell that came to her mind, without thinking:

"Expelliarmus!"

Plot contrivance. Both educationally, and double ditto on spells. SMH.
Smutley Do-Wrong chapter 5 . 10/27/2023
(BTW, it's not even sure in canon if Sirius is REALLY dead – there's no body.)

Which is convenient for Star Wars crossovers, with Harry
veil traveling there. Magic vs or contrasting with "the force" tropes.
Smutley Do-Wrong chapter 4 . 10/27/2023
Dèjá vu two, one near end of prequel, two the motorcycle in this sequel. Unless a fuzzy memory of other fanfics with Dudley, cycle, & river. Baffled if I read both fics, but forgetting 97% of them that still like hadn't read them.
Smutley Do-Wrong chapter 2 . 10/27/2023
Well. I'd many chaps prior in the prequel. Thought Fleur not actually permanently losing her "allure"/charm, might be useful option.

What star? Obviously Venus.
Sankarea396 chapter 35 . 8/1/2023
THEY COULD HAVE USED WORMTAIL TO FREE SIRIUS! THEY SHOULD'VE BROUGHT HIM TO THE AURORS NOT LEAVE HIM BEHIND! Poor Sirius still a convinced murder...
piltad chapter 52 . 6/5/2023
Amazing story
Chesterton chapter 11 . 10/22/2022
This is an excellent story and an excellent reference. Wormwood would be proud—if he were not already paying the price for his failure.
moodyboy66 chapter 52 . 6/8/2022
Loved these stories, I hope I can see this story finished
kblankenship1025 chapter 36 . 10/17/2021
Man if this doesn’t have almost every cliche moment. Honestly.
kblankenship1025 chapter 28 . 10/17/2021
Would’ve like a little more detail on the first match. Where are the Malfoy taunts. He’s a schoolyard nemesis and magical. He’s at least good at theatrics.
kblankenship1025 chapter 27 . 10/17/2021
You changed the room for no reason lol(lots of possibilities here!). Although I wish you didn’t make Hermione know about it. It’s just a bit weird.
kblankenship1025 chapter 24 . 10/17/2021
What did I just read? If only I could cast Obliviate on myself. I suppose .22 grams ought to do it. On that note I’ll also never see toads quite the same way.
kblankenship1025 chapter 23 . 10/17/2021
Would’ve been a lot better to be sure it Hedwig. Or this should’ve happened after the bloodquill and Hedwig gets revenge. Lol
kblankenship1025 chapter 14 . 10/17/2021
Blueberry as a last name? Has to be a never changed filler right?
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