there's just no way that Tom's soul piece is still in his head after his awakening and I can't believe that the sentiment god sword would allow another soul to be present aside from his and Harry's

I hate it when author's allow Hermione to read Harry's family book's like there any old book you can find in a shop and the fact that she blatantly stole one of his book's, I absolutely hate her personality

it's a shame this fic isn't cross posted on Ao3 (where lemons aren't removed) lemons tell us how creative a author is FF sucks ass

OC personality feels kinda underdeveloped imo. And her relationship with Harry is forced and kinda rushed imo. Everything else is fine, but Hinata ruins it for me.

There's a chapter missing in-between ch22 and ch23 good story though

You have such interesting and unique stories. I am saddened that you've discontinued both Harry Potter ones :(

They have been a blast to read and I do understand not having the feeling to write them anymore however. Thank you for what you've written so far!

Where could I find all the deleted scenes ?

There's a pretty big difference: Harry is rebelling against people trying to manipulate or kill him for their own ends or due to them being psychopaths. Cho is rebelling against the good of her family and wisdom of her elders who have already gone through life and know what works best and what doesn't and who know that you have to fit in with your surrounding community or else you're in for a harsh life.

Basically, he's doing what he needs to do for his survival and freedom and Cho sounds like she's just being a stereotypical teenager. Unlike with Cho, I do mean freedom. As in not being locked up or a virtual slave. Not "I wanna do whatever I feel like and screw responsibility to family and community because I'm soooo speeeeeshuuul."

I really, REALLY love how you portray dumbledore!
It's so authentic! So human! And SO very IN-character! _

It's a refreshing change from all the 'evil/selfish dumbledore' bullshit people who write Dark Harry tend to spew -as if Harry being dark or evil in any way means dumbledore somehow must be worse.

I might have to look to you for inspiration for my own fic. After all, my Harold is the Villain of the story -not the hero. And it's going to be an interesting challenge to write a Warhammer based story from the Villain's perspective, while making the hero both apropriately heroic AND enemy-material. Lol

Incidentally... do you think Cedric would make a good Chosen One? Especially considering Cho is going to be an evil enchantress -which will certantly cause some friction. (Okay, so I made her a bard, and I got some ideas for her and Cedric's relationship from Sinnergy -needless to say it'll be turbulent, to say the least.)

Aaaanyway...

I just wanted to say your story is great! And you seem to have the caracters down amazingly well. I'm impressed and envious!

Brilliant story thus far!

Small tip; The attempt of morwegian makes me want to cry, soo... If you MEANT to have the incantation mean "Brainfreeze" or something, try "Frys Hjernen" (freeze the brain) or "Frossen Hjerne" (frozen brain)

"Hjerne Frys" sounds like... how to put this... it's like when you try to say 'Free Food' and say 'Food Free.' instead.

The order of the words in norwegian is slightly different from english. If you know german or icelandic, it'll help you a lot.

(If not, ask a scandinavian. Danish, sweedish and norwegian is practically the same language, except that sweedish sounds like that weird redneck uncle who always use strange version of a word, and danish sound like norwegian if you have a potato in your mouth while speaking.)

Good luck~ _

Are you aware that ff net has removed all your sex scenes?

If you write a small hinting at sex, and leave it at that, the outcuts won't interupt the flow of the story so much.

(And you can always post the fic in it's full, or jist the sex scene, on AO3, and just insert a small type thing with a link to the right scene.)

Anyway. This story is really very catchy, once ot gets going. _

I'm sorry... could you describe the exact size and measurements of those wings?

I keep envisioning Harry looking like the hunchback of notre dame's bulkier brother every time you say he covers his wings with a loose robe.

I mean... Imagine you take a school backpack, and stuff it full of clothes. Then do the same to a second. Put them on, one on top of the other so they are taller up than your head. Now throw on a coat and tell me that looks natural! _

The other alternative is that his wings are tiny little imp wings- but with feathers. Too small to actually carry his weight, but I guess that's where magic comes in. Also... it'd look ridiculus.

Third, and last option... they're somehow double-folding like a piece of machinery...with feathers. And would still look like he's wearing a backpack underneath.

So, please... Help me see what your vision here is.

Heh. You'd THINK finding a forest in the middle of London is unusual... THINK... Buuut, nope. It's not.

I mean, depending on WHERE in London you are, and I guess Roehampton and out doesn't count, but there's still a bloody forest in the park near Primsmrose Hill. (And if you walk through the park, you land in what looks like suburbia between there and Baker Street. Lol)

But I guess Harry wouldn't know that, growing up in Surrey. Lol

...OC's...of course. /facepalm

*Deep breath*

Still... it's very well written AND includes demonic forces...

I'm keeping my fingers crossed for an interesting Hogwarts year...

what the hell?!

did mione just stole his book?