Reviews for Finding His Voice
SailorSev chapter 7 . 10/30/2005
excellent story

some humor, lots of drama, not too much angst, and very very well written.

keep it up.
WhiteCabbit chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
NO! that was actually pretty cool i liked it alot! hurry up with the next chapter!
LadyGodiva13 chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
WRITE MORE SOON! im completely in love with your story! you are a WICKED author!...

p.s. if at all possible could you make a jealous snape appear in the near future...jealous snape is so sexy...mwahahaha
Transylvanian chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
Great stoy. Can't wait to read more.
Shinjitsu to Gensou chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
Such a good story! And I love how the song lyrics compliment the chapters! I understand how you feel about how HG/SS can't be put onto paper. It's just... not right. I love this story and can't wait for the next chapter.
A Lee En chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
Wow, I just stumbled over this one and I love it. I love Snape/Hermionie fics and you're going a great job - I can so see Snape, Hermionie and Dumbledore acting just like this. Wonderful story! I'm adding you to my alerts list and anxiously awaiting an update.

Thanks for sharing this one!

Tigerfanfrv chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
aww i love sappy, fluffy fics :-} please update soon
Shdwcat27 chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
Sulky Snape. Brilliant Chapter.
whitehound chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
"...lay awake for the rest of the night, determined not to think of her" - oh dear, poor Snape!

[One minor typo - Botts should be Blotts, shouldn't it? - and ffic in its wisdom has deleted some spaces - I don't know why it sometimes does that but it's very annoying - so you've got "dragthem" and "wasalmostright."]
whitehound chapter 6 . 10/29/2005
All too horribly realistic - it takes at least months, and usually years, of constant reassurance to get through to someone with that sort of grindingly low self-esteem. Been there, done that, bought the t-shirt (in Hermione's role, not his).

[More minor typos - "even Gryffindor’s wouldn’t be so foolhardy" and "admire its’ sparkle" shpouldn't have apostrophes in - and "fools gold" should though I'm not sure whether it should be "fool's gold" or "fools' gold" - depends how many fools you are thinking of!]
whitehound chapter 5 . 10/29/2005
Believable and vivid as ever - couple more typos, hope you don't mind me pointing them out but I wouldn't bother if it wasn't such an utterly perfect story - you've got "taking her too" where it clearly should be "taking her to," "pickles dragons breath" should be "pickled dragons' breath," and Florish should surely have a u in it. And "hollered" is a blatant Americanism - we'd say "bellowed" - but I'm not sure if it matters because it's in the authorial voice rather than in Snape's or Hermione's voice.
whitehound chapter 4 . 10/29/2005
Sweet and convincing - poor lad, he really does think no-one could possibly want him, and I think that's fairly clear in canon. And I could well see Hermione turning out like this - as confident and as kind.

[Spotted some more minor typos though - there's always at least one, however many times you look. "Next weeks classes" should be "next week's classes;" "we both no perfectly well" - that should be "know;" "despite the layers of material wore" is obviously missing a word; and "one of it's own" should be "one of its own."]
whitehound chapter 2 . 10/29/2005
Hermione being brightly manipulative (why doesn't she blackmail Rita Skeeter into writing some favourable articles about Snape btw?) and brave and protective - it's time somebody stuck up for him in public, poor lad! Loved the bit about throwing salt over his shoulder at mention of Neville.

To put in little break-lines, you have to make them out of a string of alternating characters which ffic will accept (it doesn't seem to accept asterisks or tildes for example and they come out blank, and I don't think it likes strings of single characters either). Personally I use hyphens and o-s, viz. - -o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o-o- - centred and bold. If you have a look at some of my own stuff you will see what I mean. Feel free to copy and paste.

Spotted two typos in this chapter, btw - "ream of" in the first line should almost certainly be "ream off," and "the weeks classes" should be "the week's classes."

[Hope you're not offended by my pointing this out - it's just that I know how hard it is to spot typoes in one's own work, and I always hope people will point out mine for me!]

And two very minor Britpicks - Snape would think "pain-in-my-arse," not "ass" - and Hermione probably wouldn't say "jackass" unless she's been watching an awful lot of American TV recently. She'd probably say "moronic."
whitehound chapter 1 . 10/29/2005
Yeah, that sounds like Snape all right - getting control of his miserable isolation by convincing himself he prefers it :( Very well-written.
amwong88 chapter 7 . 10/29/2005
I had to reread all the previous chapters cuz i had forgotten how much i enjoy this story of yours! Really excellent job describing their feelings - snape's in particular is very evocative and realistic - and i just wanted to ask if you might include some jealousy in it? I thought it might b interesting to see how Snape deals with it when Hermione gets attention from some other guy.

anyways, great job and please please update soon!
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