|Reviews for Surviving This|
| LA Knight chapter 4 . 6/6/2012
Hey, look! I'm on chapter 4. Maybe I'll even get done ALL the chapters done before it's time to go to where the internet is (I'm reading these on an internet-less comp). Wouldn't that be a nice surprise for you? All... however many chapters reviewed in one day (except for the first one, since I review that a few days ago, sigh. My lovely plans, foiled by the time-space continuum! Gah!)!
So I mentioned before in passing about Lex being realistic and how I liked that, and also how her realism adds to her relatability, and how you make her even more relatable than she is in the movie (because I'll admit, I had a bit of trouble relating to Lex, but part of that was just the gap in our ages; I think I was 16 when I saw the film? Somewhere around there).
Anyway, the point of my random babbling is that I like that you mention that despite how in-shape she is (and the girl's got to be in shape, she leads expeditions out into the Arctic and Antarctic, which is just plain whacked-out crazy and dangerous and requires serious physical awesome-sauce-ness) she's having trouble keeping up with Scar. I mean, no matter how epic you are, you're gonna have trouble keeping up with something that's 2 feet taller than you and has legs as long as your body (I'm exaggerating a little but you get my point).
So I'm glad that while you make Lex pretty kick-butt, it's in a totally believable way and she's still not as kick-butt as Scar because there is just no way that's happening.
Wow. That was a long paragraph. I'm gonna break that up into littler ones real quick.
And then Scar calls her a wimp. At least he hasn't figured out that she's like, 25 and female. Because if he were human he'd be, what, 18? At the most? Maybe 21? So I could see him saying something like, "What a wimpy old lady" or something. It is interesting that Scar is young (it's his rite of passage, right? Because he's got to give himself the mark in the film; he doesn't have one already). So he's young. And Lex is, while not old, at least an adult. I wonder how many people take that into consideration. Anyways...
Isn't it weird how the Predators seem to be able to replay human language that is oddly appropriate, even though I think most of the time they have no idea what it means? Or does he in this fic? Because I seem to recall in the first AVP book, Dechande didn't understand the words he was replaying to Machiko, but they always fit the situation.
Although this is a fairly tense and dark fic (possibly why you have such short chapters, to maintain the tension), this line offers the perfect amount of levity. "...you'd think a person would get used to being attacked by vicious creatures from another planet after a while." As does him dinking her in the forehead with a pebble. D
Awww! He gave her a compliment! He wasn't even mad that she didn't kill the thing. Yay!
Oh, crap. Bye-bye, jacket.
Okay, now I'm really wondering - DOES Scar know what he's say when he replays the English? Or not?
On to chapter 5!
- LA Knight
| LA Knight chapter 3 . 6/6/2012
And here we are for chapter three!
And it starts off with agony!
Agony from green alien goo!
Now everybody join in and say - ew!
Sorry, I have no idea where that came from. Anyway, so I love this fic. I have to say that. I love it. I adore it. It's awesome. You're awesome. I'd say I love you, too, but that would be creepy. So I'll just say I love your writing skills. Yes I do.
So it totally makes sense that Lex, being an expert in wilderness survival, would take the time to deal with her injuries while she has a moment. And it makes sense that her arm wound would hurt the most because (except for childbirth and having your femur bone cracked in half, which I've heard are the 2 MOST painful things anyone can experience EVER) burns are some of the most painful injuries you can have. At least in my experience.
"It was beginning to ache in the way all burns did—a consistent, edged throbbing that grew more and more acute." OOOOH! GRRRR! YES! Stupid burns. We hates them, precious, yes we does, hates them, HATES them. *gollum, gollum*
Oooh! *wince* Definite concussion. Is the bone cracked? I'm just wondering if that's why pressure made it hurt so badly.
"For a long moment I just stood there, willing my dizziness to fade, willing my body to hold itself together so that maybe, just maybe, I could make it out of here alive." As I was saying about Lex's will to survive, lol.
Ew! Xenomorph slime! You know, here's a question. You probably don't have the answer, but it's an interesting one, I think. Why is xenomorph blood acidic, but their saliva is not? And since they make the little egg-holder things with their spit (I assume), does that mean the face-huggers are vulnerable to the acid blood? Do face-huggers and chest-busters have acid blood? Do we know? And what happens to a face-hugger that has no face to hug? Does it die? Hibernate?
Anyway, back on topic.
Awww! '( Isn't Miller the Irish guy who was taking pictures for his kids? I knew he died, but... well... meh. (
HA! She killed the little sucker! Oh, but then she had to kill Sebastian. This part is so much sadder in your fic than in the movie. Maybe just because it's words versus film, I dunno, but it is. Congrats on emotional responses induced with your literary brilliance.
Hello, Scar. *sigh* Are you going to kill Lex now? You shouldn't do that. Oh, good, you're not gonna.
You know, the subtext of the whole "exchange" between them, from his POV, strikes as basically being like, "You killed that? Huh. That's two. Okay; you may be small and an ooman, but you're okay. Let's go hunt some Hard Meat." And the "Let's go hunt" part is said in the same way Aragorn in The Fellowship of the Ring film says, "Let us hunt some Orc."
Oh, the end again. Such a short chapter. Lamentations.
Ah, but wait! I have ALL of your AVP work on my computer! Ahahahahahaha! On to chapter 4. Oh, wait, I have to go bug my husband first. THEN onto chapter 4!
| LA Knight chapter 2 . 6/6/2012
And I'm back for chapter 2 because I *will* review every chapter of this awesomesauce piece. I *will!*
So I love that she throws the spear at Scar not out of bravery or irritation or anything like that - it's because she's stark terrified and it's the only thing she can think of.
I remember when I read through one of the author's notes either in this fic or the sequel, you said you didn't want her to be another... oh, what's that girl's name? Machiko? The human who teamed up with the Predators in the AVP books. Anyway, I just wanted you to know, you're doing a great job with Lex doing this and not having her be Machiko (I think that's her name).
The title of this fic really fits - it is ALL about survival. Everything Lex does is out of a desire to survive. Not a thrill of the hunt, not out of desire to be hooked up with Scar for his own sake, none of that - she just wants to make it out alive. And that not only makes her incredibly realistic, it makes her incredibly relatable. So rock on.
I also love that he laughs at her and she gets mad. When you're scared, it is easy to turn fear into anger. To quote Yoda, "Fear leads to anger" and so on and so forth. So I like that. Because being mocked when you're scared out of your mind would tick anyone off, I think. And then she hurts him with the knife and Scar don't think it's so funny no more, hehe. Dumb teenage boy. He's kinda like, "Cute little ooman- OW! WTF, mate? You actually hurt me! Gelfling, you die!"
Sorry, I just realized that if you've never seen The Dark Crystal, you have no idea why that last part is relevant. Ah, well...
Whoa. Scar can rip a xenomorph off of his back with ONE HAND? If I wasn't married, I'd consider marrying him.
Kudos for having Lex not make it through this unscathed. I thought she got through the movie with not as many injuries as she should have (though I seem to recall she WAS injured), so I like that already she's scraped up, has what might be a mild concussion, and now an acid burn. And despite all this, she managed to kill the stupid thing anyway. I wish I could be that bada$$. I am phobically afraid of zombies, and this kind of sheer bada$$ery would come in handy in case of zombie apocalypse.
Awww. Scar gave her her weapon back. The only reason this is cute to me is because I know they kiss or something later (I haven't read that far in your series, but my roommate read it and apparently they have a moment? Or many moments? I'm totally okay with that, btw). Anyway, so forearmed with the knowledge of their impending relationship, I view certain things in ways different than I might otherwise.
Anywho, I'm glad that you're dragging out the bonding moment. Instead of them bonding in like, 5 minutes of screentime (I seem to recall it doesn't take long, but it's been years since I've seen the film), it takes a few chaps. Although I wish your chapters were longer so I could have more of your AVP goodness.
Oh, hey, the end. On to chapter 3! Yay!
PS - I highly recommend OceanFire9's comedy AVP one-shot, "I Kissed a Predator and I Liked It" as well as her somewhat sad one-shot "Starry Hunters," which draws interesting parallels between Lex/Scar and Artemis/Orion. Ocean is the one who recommended you to me. )
| LA Knight chapter 1 . 6/2/2012
So I have actually read this entire fic already, and read most if not all of the sequel. However, I am a horrible lazy slacker and haven't reviewed. So to make sure you know how very much I adore your work (your AVP fics are THE best chap-fics in the fandom) I've decided to show the love and review. And I'm going to review EVERY chapter of EVERY chap-fic you've done. So don't think I'm spamming you or anything - I just want to tell you what I love about your work. Fan mail is good, yes?
So first, I love that you don't start at the beginning of the movie. That would be BO-ring. I like that you start at the very moment when Lex is like, "Oh, dude, I am so f***ed." And then I like that she cries. Of course she cries. Who wouldn't cry? In fact, I am probably one of those people who would curl up into a ball and wait to die, unfortunately. Not Lex, though. She cries, but doesn't lose it. Cries, then picks herself up, and is like, "Okay, here I go. I'm probably gonna die, but here I go." And I love that.
Also, can I just how much your word choice rocks. It's hard sometimes with first-person POV because you might have a beautiful descriptor, but the reader's like, "Would a person really say that?" Not so here. Here, the beauty and the awesomeness fit with Lex. "So I went, deeper into the black, yawning depths of the corridor that loomed before me, one trembling step at a time." Oooh, shiver. Yay-ness. And this line, too! "...my knees had half buckled when I felt a shudder claw its way up my spine."
And kudos on your tactful usage of adverbs. I was talking to someone else about overusing adverbs, and how it's hard to know when to step back and when to push, but you've got it DOWN.
Ew - relief, then corpses. Gross. Oh, so you know, I'm writing my review as I read through chapter 1 again. In case you were wondering.
I love her reaction to the hunter. She's not gung-ho "I'm gonna kick your a$$," she's like, "Oh, crap, I'm dead." Which is a) totally and completely believable, and b) makes the whole fact that she makes it through not only this fic, but all the others, so AMAZING. Not that she's weak, because she's not. But she's WAY more relatable in this fic than even in the movie, because she is a totally normal average person, basically, and yet she survives everything you put her through. I LOVE it. And the fact that the alien is fascinating is so cool. It's like how mice have a hard time not being mesmerized by snakes.
"As they grappled, as the infuriated roars of the hunter mingled in chaotic cadence with the shrieks of the alien..." And this right here is proof that I will NEVER be as cool as you. "chaotic cadence." Jeez, I love that. XD
Run away, Lex! Move it! Don't be a hero! See, this is why I like her - she has COMMON SENSE. How many movie heroines do NOT? Sigh.
I love Lex's pragmatism. Of course, she's an arctic explorer person (I sound so NOT smart right now, sigh) so she has to learn to be pragmatic, but I love it all the same. She's like, "Ew, nasty corpse. Crap, need weapons. C'mere, nasty corpse."
Ooooh. Scar says, "You took my spear, woman. I think I might kill you. Let me ponder for a moment. Grrrrr..."
Aw, crap. I'm at the end of the chapter. That is my only complaint, you amazing lady - short chapters. I understand, tho - love to read long chapters, but hate to write them, lol. Which is surprising, because my longest and most popular fic has crazy-long chapters, but anyway... onto chapter 2! Or is it dinnertime? Uh-oh, gotta check...
| purrfus chapter 12 . 2/23/2012
Both endings have their strong points, but since I'm looking forward to more I'll pick this one as the best.
| purrfus chapter 1 . 2/23/2012
Some people complain that ffn is full of crud. And there is some. But there are also delicious buried treasure for those who make the effort. Can't wait to read more.
| RinCoKenn chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
| idonotwanttobehere chapter 12 . 7/31/2011
This whole fic was brilliant, start to finish I enjoyed it. Good job, it was well written and ..and... awesome. I am going on to read more of your stuff ;)
| Dontgotaclue88 chapter 12 . 4/1/2011
lol WOW! loved this and am now going to read Sacrifice Theory. You rock! .
| Golfbabe87 chapter 12 . 11/8/2010
I loved this story it was so unique! I find it very interesting and exciting to have another predator included in the storyline. I am going to go read the sequel!
| Lina03 chapter 12 . 7/12/2010
Wow, what an ending..but much more satisfying that the original one. I loved it! _
| DarthRabbit102 chapter 2 . 6/27/2010
It is very very good
| frnight chapter 12 . 3/24/2010
Great story. I'm really looking forward to reading the sequal.
| frnight chapter 10 . 3/24/2010
Wow, I'm already at the end? I hate it when a story I'm really enjoying ends. At least I have the sequal!
| frnight chapter 9 . 3/24/2010
lol. As Lex says: 1 human and 2 teenaged predators. This story definitely has charm.