Reviews for Vacation In Another World: Revolution Version
Random chapter 4 . 10/17/2005
Well, well, well... If it isn't another typical OC story. Don't get me wrong it's got great potential because you seem like a fairly adequate writer. But I mean really, try to make it more interesting, like maybe your OC could oh i dont know LOSE A BATTLE? *GASP* im beginning to tire of these stories which are all the bloody same, monotonous and boring! Try and break out of the loop. Also, the story is moving way to quickly. So hilary meets Jolt and has suddenly fallen in love with him? this might not be what your trying to achieve, but it sure sounds like it. There are moments in the story when you captured my attention though and that's when you thoroughly explain the description of jolt's beyblade. Work more on your strong points, and please PLEASE improve on your weaker ones. Don't make your OC another god-damn Larry-stue.
Jeni chapter 13 . 9/12/2005
*sniffle* *sniffle*

YOU'RE SCARY! WAH *pout**sniffle*

*GLARE**pulls out knife*

Danny: uh-oh...

I know! I'll make the scary thing go away!

Danny: *shields groin* NO NOT MY BALLS!
Jeni chapter 12 . 9/12/2005
... I hate Hilary...

Somehow i would think Jolt would know what a boob felt like, seeing as though you made him have a kid...


I have internet! Finally!
rozi chapter 13 . 8/7/2005
and... u didnt believe me... huh?... and YAy im the first to read it too...
Yurii Savinov chapter 1 . 8/2/2005
AWESOME! plz update soon! as for pairs, i vote Kai x Jolt
Krokedans chapter 12 . 7/14/2005
Yeah, about that Lemon you keep promising... When's it going to happen? Seriously. I've been a good girl, sitting here quietly, NOT nagging you, and it HASN'T HAPPENED! ARGH!

Moving on. Great chapter! Keep it up!
Jeni chapter 11 . 7/5/2005



worst torture scene ... ever...
Monkeyluv4646 chapter 11 . 6/16/2005
UM...Is this an OC fic with only an oc pairing cus thats what it seems like it. I hope not!

I vote(if your voting)Jolt Hilary

so kawaii
Pr0xy Mine chapter 11 . 6/13/2005

YOU'VE ACTUALLY UPDATED! Yeah! Praise the gods!


My little mind did not to envision the graphic things you put into it. May I remind you that there is STILL a child in here *points to head*, and it sees and hears ALL.

*mutters* Freakin' little pervert inside my fucking head...
fireph03n1x chapter 11 . 6/13/2005
do you think I would really do that to you?
Jeni chapter 10 . 6/10/2005
That last review, I thught it was the tenth chapter... _;

*frowns* shut up...

I'm slow okay!
Jeni chapter 1 . 6/10/2005
DADDY *glomp*

guess what! i had sugar and I'm at school and *looks around suspiciously* I see dead people...

i was too damn lazy to read your whole story, but i saw a sentence that my sick mind picked up. "Laying on something, yet flexible"

Oh and you wrote "Bladders" again.

*Points and laughs*
hehheh chapter 10 . 5/12/2005
jolt...write more... hehehe...
Hellfires Fury chapter 8 . 5/6/2005
lmao..ignore that question that i asked in mai review for ch. 10...haha i went nd read ur profile...newayz..ok then...o wait..nother question: do u have a super cool accent? lmao..newayz g2g byz
Hellfires Fury chapter 9 . 5/6/2005
HI! lmao...nice story! luv it! ok heres mai ques...are u really australian?..ok mai question is over...XP..welpz g2g review other stories so byzby!
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