Reviews for The Vanquished One
Dirby chapter 8 . 5/11/2005
cool
trina-k chapter 8 . 5/11/2005
so loving tessa.

update!

p.s. i need to just make a comment about your chris fic that i also love to read, you know what i'm talking about... the poison is in magic school... gideon is in magic school... do you see me panicking here?
Kelly White Peach Lover chapter 8 . 5/10/2005
Took awhile for this chapter but I'm glad you have it up. Can you please make them get along soon.
Taynna chapter 7 . 4/8/2005
ooh, i like this story. i put off reading this fic before now, not b/c i didn't want to but b/c i was WAY behind in watching season 7 and didn't want to read this until i'd caught up. now i'm wishing i'd caught up sooner so i could have read this already!

i've always hated the way the cole storyline finally ended. there were a few aspects of it that i enjoyed. if nothing else, it was always very well acted by alyssa milano and julian mcmahon, but the cole character was so compelling and really deserved to be treated so much better! there were so many times during that season that i just wanted to scream "give the guy a break already!" at the writers.

but i degress.

first, i LOVE the way you've written cole! i like the softer side he shows with his daughter without being a total pushover (the breakfast thing is adorable) and his ambiguous feelings and animosity towards the sisters are really well done. he certainly has cause for righteous anger (even if also COMPLETELY agree with piper's determination not to let him use guilt against them), but i also appreciate his obvious efforts not to let his own feelings harm his daughter's potential relationship with her mother and aunts. his repeated attempts to convince himself that he doesn't care about the girls (esp phoebe) are a great touch to his character and how he's dealing (or isn't dealing) with their past relationships.

tessa is also great. as a minor critique, i do think she's a little too articulate for even a genius 4-year-old, but she's not too far off the mark, esp if she were an 'old' four (i'm not great with the timelines here and i'm too lazy to look it up right now...).

as villains go, the mysterious 'Lady' is, so far, very intriguing. i really want to know who she is and what she hoped to gain by revealing tessa to the sisters. also, how did 'Lady' know of tessa's existence at all if even the elders were unaware of her?

the characterization of the sisters and leo seems just right as well. i really enjoy the subtle way you've woven references to their recent tradgedies into the dialogue. using cole's confusion about the out of character (for the sisters and leo as he remembers them anyway) behaviors contrasts the family's current situation and mentality with that of a few years ago and really makes their current grief and darker world view stand out for the reader. i also like the way cole is slowly picking up details about the events of seasons 6 & 7 - it should be very interesting to see what cole's reaction is to the full events that he's missed. and, as a fellow chris-lover, i esp. want to know what he thinks of the sisters having 'met' chris at 22 before his actual birth and i'm eager to get his view of how that chris' 'death' at the hands of an elder has changed them, for better and worse.

okay, this review has gotten ridiculous in size, so i'm going to wrap it up here. i hope that you can post more of this one soon ;)
Night-Owl123 chapter 7 . 4/7/2005
update soon! _
ethereal girl chapter 7 . 4/2/2005
wow very great story - love it that pc dont just get together, but that both of them refuse - all other is not really believable. Please updat soon
SARAH220 chapter 7 . 3/21/2005
please tell me you will continue this story. It is so good. You have to finish it! Anyway, hope you'll review soon!
nascar Girl chapter 7 . 3/17/2005
I really like this. good job. I see both of Phoebe & Coles point of view but wow, is very cute. update again when you can! Good luck at school t/c
emily chapter 7 . 3/16/2005
wow great story! hope you will review soon.
sarah22 chapter 7 . 3/8/2005
hope you'll review soon. Can't wait!
Tilius chapter 7 . 3/3/2005
Great story. Cant wait for more.
SARAH chapter 1 . 2/26/2005
YOUR STORY IS REALLY GOOD. EACH DAY I COME TO SEE IF YOU PUT ANOTHER CHAPTER. HOPE THERE WILL BE ONE SOON.
sehar chapter 7 . 2/19/2005
hey a gr8 chp again..plz make Phoebe and Cole together something romantic...can't wait..plz upate soon..good work.
TvLuVa chapter 7 . 2/19/2005
I just love this story! The plotline is excellent and they way you express the characters emotions is amazing! Is there any chance that you might make Cole and Phoebe get back togther because they are like my favorite couple ever!
Ceres217 chapter 7 . 2/19/2005
Cool chapter. Cannot wait for more. Tessa is really cute and it was really sweet as Cole told her about friends...
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