|Reviews for Eyes of the Jackal|
| Lizzy chapter 36 . 3/18/2005
Wow, I read the whole lot last night and it took me four hours. This probebly sounds pervy but I loved the sex scene.
Keep the story going.
| aeipathy chapter 35 . 3/18/2005
You leave me breathless as always. This was quite abrupt but in the way that all writers hope to be - abrupt in a way that makes readers gasp and become transfixed to their material. It never fails to amaze me how beautifully you construct the exchanges between Raoul and Erik, whether they are arguing, fighting, or in this case, sleeping together - its always perfect, just what it should be, no more and no less.
| hiei1317 chapter 36 . 3/18/2005
amazing, and beautifully emotional. I really like this chapter, and I think that it's my favorites over all the others so far for many reasons, mostly from the emotion you truly find here. Keep up the amazing work.
| sbkar chapter 36 . 3/18/2005
*finds wad of tissues! HONK! Blows nose fiercely after that peak into Erik's hate! Oh, what agony we heap upon ourselves!
Will there ever be any happiness for either of them? Could it be possible?
| sbkar chapter 35 . 3/18/2005
Author of most charming discernment...This was an apt place for the sex to occur, and you handled it with grace... Brava!
Raoul taking some chances, and Erik giving some respect... makes all the more reason to keep reading!
| Yep it was good chapter 36 . 3/17/2005
Sorry I didn't review the previous chapter... I was about to when the notification for this chappie came up.
I love how you've kept both Raoul and Erik realistic... That's rather hard to do. Please update soon.
| BohemiaLMM chapter 36 . 3/17/2005
Now this is definitely a chapter that is one of my favourites. I love how we get an Erik insight after so much of Raoul (even though I adore Raoul). And, it's sort of sad to hear that this has to end soon.
| ahomelesspirate chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
You totally don't need to explain, or apologize or whatever you did at the beginning of the fic for who yu wrote "the sex". You wrote it very well, and brought focus to aspects of the physical relationship that had been important in other aspects of the relationship; specifically, how Erik hurts Raoul, and the way Raoul reacts to this. This was a very well done chapter, and Erik has transcended his previously static (or mostly static) character. I am quite pleased with the development. good job.
| Becki3 chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
*Sigh* That was just perfect. I've never read any other scene like that before and it was just lovely.. and delicious. Leaves me all warm and fuzzy. u.u;
| Sat-IsisSuten Net chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
::sniffle:: That was so beautiful!
_ I'm sorry, I really don't have something more intelligent to say right now.
| whatevergirl chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
aww, beautiful, but what would his parents think! i'm glad he didn't leave! :)
| Cyprith chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
Read this at school and had to keep hiding it from the evil keyboarding teacher. Lol!
I like the indriect sex. After writing smut for a year or two (Got banned for it on Sanely Challenged) I got tired of the same stuff. It was always the same lines worded differently. I've been trying the hazy, indirect way too. It gives the reader more room to add details. I think if its well written, it can be /really/ hot. More so than, as you put it, "Insert tab A into slot B."
This was very well done, I think. Most people have trouble putting it in present tense. They use to many adverbs (I hate adverbs!) or constantly use "He felt". Like 'Raoul felt his jaw clench.'
I'm reading it and saying, "Okay. His jaw has a mind of its own and its spasming. Hes not doing it, its his jaw. Right. I get it. Raoul did not clench his jaw, he /felt/ it clenching."
But yours is very nice. It never makes me cringe and wish I had got a shot at beta-ing it before it ever met the internet. Yours makes me sit up in my chair and beg for more.
I think you mentioned a fic where Erik and Raoul go traveling. (We're out of the batcave now, Robin er... Raoul.) Is it a sequel to this one?
| ElvenPirate41 chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
Wonderful, amazing job. I liked the way you kept the sex scene un-pornish; it was more about feelings than, as you said, "inserting tab A into slot B". That sort of writing usually turns me off to a fic, but this was different... not exactly what you'd call subtle, but not quite blatant either.
The conversation afterwards was delicously dark, and I like Erik's acceptance of their relationship.
| emeraldwolf chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
ah. lovely. i'm glad someone agrees with me on the whole "insert tab A" thing not being nearly as romantic or sensual as just describing everything else that goes on. really a wonderful chapter. i like the post sex semi-bickering. i really hope you continue this fic, even if it takes you a long time to finish it. in fact, preferably if it keeps going for a long time. _~ rock on author.
| BohemiaLMM chapter 35 . 3/17/2005
Good chapter. I love the end of it, especially. Very nice. :) Update soon!