Not a bad story, but the dialogue is just atrocious. It's just stream-of-conciousness word vomit filled with run on sentences and paragraphs that take up half a page. Harry's dialogue, especially, just fucking sucks. He speaks like a schizophrenic who jumps from one topic to another constantly.

Rowling imagined and wrote, seemingly without forethought.

In the first book she introduced the ICW then never used it.

The ICW should have sent help to Britain when Voldemort killed muggleborns.

Tom would shatter the statute of secrecy.

The ICW never helped, did Dumbledore lie and block them?

Just ONE of many stupid mistakes on Rowling's part.

I was actually rather surprised by how sweet this story ended. I was also very surprised by the pairings. Personally I would have left it at Bella and Tonks rather than add Ginny to the mix but it all worked out well in the end. Overall I quite enjoyed the story and the background on how Harry became who he is in this piece. I would have liked a bit more world building and explanations on how Harry became as powerful as he is and took control of Azkaban. However the story worked well even without the added info.

A well-done story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Great epilogue!

Exciting story indeed!

Great story.

I loved the story up to adding Ginny, with the exception of the bits that are like reading a technical manual... (my eyes glazed over - TMI) fortunately I was able to skip over the really boring bits...
But it's a fun read, so go for it... some of the grammar and spelling is really hilarious... the use of similar word almost feels deliberate... a game of spot the mistake is always fun...

dude traññy mad fic! so good!

An awesome badass Harry!

Mixed Feelings with this Story...
its okay but yeah , its a read and time Spent

totally agree with other reviewers below my review.

overall a good story and I like how you did the pairings too for the secondary characters.

ron was frankly really just a shitty friend and the ron/hermione pairing would never have worked.

i won't get started on stupid hermione/snape pairings that some of the fandom like. eeew that crosses too many lines

Hmmmmmm.

It's interesting to see such an immature Harry Potter. I wouldn't have noticed it, however, had I not seen one line in particular.
"...they recognized that they could help make the magical world a much better place by remaining a part of it."
That single line makes me sad that Harry did not, and shows how young and immaturehe truly is.
No matter. This is quite a good story, with only minor homonym issues. Good work.

Indeed, it is a must read! I thought it was longer, but is a great four chapter story!

a fucking foursome? i'm not even gonna try staying