|Reviews for Goodbye|
| Mr.WhatTheHeck chapter 1 . 6/8/2005
Ok, one thing you should know, is that you NEVER add any thing like game statistics. No talk of criticals, and use parens (these things) to much, it takes you out of the story to much. And again, don't use any game stats. Another usage of this would be how you mentioned how Rebbecca was a fast archer, thus making her vital. It makes it less of a story, and more of an essay.
Hope I helped
| The Blazing Blade chapter 1 . 3/19/2005
Nils... used a killing edge? Wow...
| SKSuncloud chapter 1 . 3/1/2005
...The strangest part was that Nils could fight. I like all Rebecca fics, so I liked this. You have a good plot line, but it's all told like some long ranting summary. You should add a bit more description and maybe re-format the paragraphs so it isn't all just stuffed together. I think you could easily expand this into a multi-chapter fanfic! I do like the idea of having Nils and Becca together, though I'm a strong believer in Becca/Wil. Anyway, Kewl! I'd like to see more of this story!