|Reviews for Rogue|
| Fate8 chapter 1 . 3/8/2005
It's pretty good. Excellent use of detail. Dialogue is good.
Make sure to start a new paragraph whenever a new person speaks. It helps to cut down on reader confusion.
I was also unsure if the soldiers were on a rescue mission or did they just stumble across the carnage.
Other than that, I really want to see this story develop. I think you have a great idea.
| Aqualung833 chapter 1 . 3/6/2005
This is great! Dont stop writing.
| Raptor-Chick chapter 1 . 2/28/2005
This is really good so far! Please update!