|Reviews for Eye of the Beholder|
| Lerolain chapter 2 . 11/25/2005
Argh I'm going to have to sleep with the light on tonight. I should have known better than to read this - my beta reader started playing Doom 3 the other night and I made him stop. I'm such a wimp I was scared even BEFORE the zombies started coming. This was so atmospheric I felt that I was there with Carl and it really captured the heavy-breathing-heart-hammering-stomach-churning-bowel-clenching terror that is Doom.
Writing wise, I liked your use of present tense. It makes everything feel more raw and urgent. With first person past tense you feel the person will survive - otherwise how are they telling the story? - but first person present tense is edgy and chilling.
(That's a five star rating, by the way)