|Reviews for Stolen Devotion|
| Marching Madly Onward chapter 1 . 6/1/2019
This one is even better than Augur. Whereas Augur was a seed of an idea, this one has bloomed into something like a car crash. Stolen Devotion is awful, but I cannot look away.
At first blush, Haku turning on Zabuza in any way struck me as wildly out-of-character, but by the time it reached the final line, I believed every word. Now that's one hell of a magic trick.
You peel back the layers in such a fascinating way, but there is still a ghost of a doubt - how much of what Itachi said was true, and how much was a fistful of lies fed through a genjutsu filter? Your Itachi makes me so uncomfortable. I love it. A shame that his character turned out the way it did in the home run of the manga, but I'm glad that didn't stop you from playing with these toys in Kishimoto's sandbox.
You have a wonderful knack for taking aspects of the Naruto canon that are already strange and upsetting - demons living on in fleshy cages, children as weapons, sociopaths with superpowers - and cranking them up to 11. If this is your swan song to Naruto fanfiction, then you went out on one hell of a high note. If you should ever feel the need to come back, then I will be right there in the front row.
| sovandeprins chapter 1 . 4/29/2017
This was a wonderful read from start to finish. The emotions feel so real and I had to hold my breath more than once. Thank you for writing this.
| een nihc chapter 1 . 9/21/2011
I love how devilish and manipulating Itachi is in this fic. The writing is great but Haku's sudden change-of-heart still feels unlikely to me. His loyalty is something to be reckoned with. Interesting read nonetheless. Thanks for the entertainment.
| Kaze and Kiba chapter 1 . 9/2/2011
I found your story by looking through someone else's favorites to try and find a good read.
Great, original, writing here. I like to see a dark Itachi once in a while. And why not? He is very good at it, after all. Beautiful, descriptive writing, Ookami-chan, and the setting and length seemed just right.
I enjoyed your storytelling very much.
| Ekun-Asha chapter 1 . 5/23/2011
| Sony Boy chapter 1 . 2/28/2010
You know, the Naruverse world has just taken a turn for the dark...unless Naruto 'steals' Haku from Itachi. Still poor Zabuza and Haku. ;_;
| LurkerLost chapter 1 . 12/14/2008
Oh my God... I was cringing throughout the whole fic. I couldn't look away, it was so disturbing... OH HAKU. ZABUZA. *incoherent*
This was so amazingly well written, I can't even... This kind of fic is REALLY not my cup of tea, BUT I JUST COULDN'T LOOK AWAY... *traumatised*
I LOVE/HATE YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS.
| RakeeshJ4 chapter 1 . 12/18/2007
Hmm. A very good, horrifying story and an artful example of how easy it is to get devotion from desperate children.
Still, I am dissatisfied with it for personal reasons of taste and philosophy. I don't like the idea that someone can so easily subvert someone else's will-it runs up into the idea I have that, even when we don't recognize it, we've always got a choice, even if it's just a choice between something awful and something even more awful. I am unconvinced that Itachi's Mangekyo can be so effective a tool for brainwashing and mind-slaving with someone he's never even met...and someone who his only commonality is childhood genius.
After all, we only ever see him using it in two ways: blunt torture of Kakashi, and blunt torture of Sasuke...and any brainwashing of Sasuke seems to have been due as much to the circumstances as by Itachi's Mangekyo. Also, it should be noted that any use of Mangekyo is wearying, but two consecutive uses especially so.
But these are quibbles with the underlying 'theme' of the story, not with the story itself. Thanks for sharing.
But no one who's still got some good in them is ever so far gone that they're beyond being saved:)
| Efimia chapter 1 . 11/8/2006
oh my god, that was so good. You are an awsome writer, that was so descriptive and amazing. Beautiful. this was really great! Dont stop writing!
| The Violent Tomboy chapter 1 . 11/7/2006
WTF? Wow, so...wait, so confused, but so cool and...my brain can't comprhend this that well...
| Fate chapter 1 . 6/6/2006
This was brilliantly written!
| IMP chapter 1 . 10/25/2005
Hm...well, this was interesting, to say the least.
I think it was an interesting take on the darker side of humanity, playing on the wants and fears of Haku, a boy who has not know love beyond that of those who use him, and the superb characterization of Itachi, skillfully weaving a tale of betrayal and memories in order to turn a lost boy-turned-weapon into a device for Itachi's own desires and dark plotting (of whatever he may be plotting at this point in time...ehh, let's not debate the timeline, here, huh?)
I think the entire idea of the story was wonderfully executed, and the way you told the story made it seem all the more believeable, amongst the crack-tastic plot shown, and your wonderful descriptions throughout the entire 'fic just made the story even better.
My only major points of criticism is that the story is a bit hard to get into. Well, hm...scratch that. The very beginning serves to draw you in, and it does that. But somewhere in the middle, you lost my attention. I'm not quite sure how to remedy that, so I'm not going to try to say anything else in that subject, except for that you might have made it a little too long for my tastes.
The last point I have to make is your last line,
"Elsewhere, Tazuna’s bridge was completed with ease under the protection of Team 7."
M...well, I'll readily admit that Haku and Zabuza served as extremely difficult (understatement, much?) adversaries to team seven, you can't forget that it wasn't just them that were after Tazuna. In fact, they were just hired by Gatou, who was the major underlying factor for that entire arc of the series, and had Zabuza and Haku not been hired by Gatou at all, other thugs woud still have been sent to take care of Tazuna.
And though, sure, those enemies probably wouldn't have been NEARLY as difficult as Zabuza and Haku would have been, they still would have been difficult for team seven, as they were newly appointed genin and weren't really battle hardened yet.
Sorry, just me being nitpicky.
But, seriously, good job. This was a really good idea, with even better characterization, and the fic deserves more reviews than it recieved. If you write more stuff like this, be sure to tell me! Because Itachi/Haku sounds...eh...hot.
| Ashley chapter 1 . 9/8/2005
Really didn't like that at all, and if you're wondering why I finished it... call it morbid curiosity. Which is not to say it wasn't well written- it was as your fics invariably are, it just wasn't my cup of tea.
| Porc chapter 1 . 7/1/2005
Much love. *squee!*
| Gods fallen little angel chapter 1 . 4/20/2005
hay weres turn abouts fair play?