|Reviews for Living without Danger|
| cuteandcreative chapter 27 . 21h ago
I preface this comment with a compliment. I thoroughly enjoy the dangerverse. However, I find at times you over write. Believe it or not there is such a thing as too much detail and at times it feels like parts of the story are less for the plot and more for the sake of word count. The whole idea of Harry dying in a freak quiddich accident is down right absurd and in my humble opinion should have been left out. I hope you are not offended by my comment, I truly am a fan.
| Yurippe chapter 4 . 1/16
I think you're a terrific writer, and I thouroughly enjoyed Living with Danger. Naturally, I was excited to read the sequel, but I have to say I am a little disappointed so far. Everything just goes too well for the cubs, and the special treatment they get - their own secret apartment, their pack in Hogwarts for Hermione's birthday - is a bit too much for me. Yes, they've had it tough in life and deserve some rewards, but everyone else has to navigate school the normal way and it just seems unfair that the cubs get so many nice treats thrown in for them.
| Fick Chick chapter 22 . 11/17/2013
Dangerous stuff from Danger...grabbing a pan from which cooked bacon was just removed...flinging a load of hot grease everywhere.
| anothergoneagain chapter 5 . 10/31/2013
What happened might be different with what JKR did however the pack is acting completely out of character. You can't have it both ways either they are loyal to each other or they're not. How come everybody's okay with the emotional blackmail that moody so obviously displaying?
I love your story but I hate this chapter seems as if it comes from a completely different story
| Alagaisia chapter 23 . 10/9/2013
Oh come on, we all know there's another entrance to the den in the Ravenclaw dorms, luna should have been Ravenclaw.
| Alagaisia chapter 19 . 10/9/2013
I think you should change the ending. Either have Slytherin actually win, or have the points have been awarded beforehand. I was really hoping that this would have been changed, as it is a weak ending in the actual book, (even worse in the movie somehow) and only tolerated in general because its Harry Potter. I'm not trying to be mean or overly-critical. To somewhat defend myself: after trying for years, I finally got my dad to read the first Harry potter book. When I asked him about it when he was finished, he brought up that particular scene, saying it seemed biased and a little bit cheesy.
| Alagaisia chapter 4 . 10/8/2013
I think we all know who's getting the new broom... And what sort of broom it is...
| aaaaaaaaa chapter 5 . 10/1/2013
Wow, Remus is kind of being a prick. Harry didn't have a choice - Hermione was going to be killed. And since when is Harry "dishonoring his parents' memories" by doing exactly the same thing they would have done?
| Scaehime chapter 33 . 9/28/2013
So, what's the story about the lucimpeds? And was tuat a Macbeth reference I saw? Oh, and I DO bite my thumb at any and all flamers of this fic series!
| lilyginnyrose chapter 9 . 9/7/2013
That dream is eerily riminiscent of a scene in dealing with danger.
| lilyginnyrose chapter 8 . 9/7/2013
I forgot to say a few chapters back. Was alex using the slytherin second gift(that was making predictions right) when he told Draco all eight of them would be at hogwarts next year?
and the dangerverse wiki says neville is the beta male of the pride. shouldn't that be draco as an other Cub? or Ron as mate to the beta female?
| Earth's-Only-Saviour chapter 36 . 9/4/2013
Ha ha! Just the image of werewolf Remus trotting around under the table, stealing napkins from people's laps made me laugh. Really, Remus, I would have expected that from Fang! But then again, you are a Marauder! So, I completed another story! Now, onto the third! I'm excited! And I'm going to start reading it now!
| UniquelyMi chapter 36 . 9/4/2013
This fic reminded me in many ways of another series called Veritas that you can read at .weebly. com
I really enjoyed the first book, but I think the second one fell a bit flat. I think at some point they just got too much. There's Danger, with her uber-special magic, and Luna, junior seer, and Meghan, junior healer who can even raise the dead, and the mind communication and pendants and Founders' Heirs and now Neville! And this isn't even counting the influence from Sirius and Remus and Aletha, etc. And they have support from Minerva and Dumbledore. Without those special powers I would have expected Harry, with his penchant for doing the impossible, to not only defeat Voldemort but reform the Wizarding world. With it, they should at least be ending world hunger :D Well, maybe they will, eventually.
And I find that while a few of the situations were because of good planning on the antagonists' part, a lot of them could have been easily solved using their special powers. A lot of the time I feel like these powers are only being remembered at the last minute to
get them out of something, and that there are so many you can't keep track of all of them, much less their limitations.
Limitations: another thing. They aren't very consistent or prominent. It seems like limitations are the basis for why everything's turning out like canon (so why are there these powers?) so I'd assume that for all the powers there's an equally great drawback to balance it out. Except there isn't. And you didn't seem to have changed the enemies much either, which could have been another explanation.
I'm sorry. I feel like I'm flaming you or at least complaining overly much. Really, this is well written, though the characters are too powerful and the story too canonical. You have a great grasp of grammar, even the dreaded ';' vs. ','. My recommendation would be to cut out half the powers (like the fire-thing which only turns up once) and replace them with clever solutions that use their brains rather than a given power. I understand that changing the plot would be difficult.
P.S. "To follow your chosen leader..." Can't a Hufflepuff be a leader too? They need loyalty as well! And a Gryffindor can be a follower.
| Earth's-Only-Saviour chapter 33 . 9/4/2013
WOOHOO! Go Pack-Parents! Nice one. Neville's magic works in strange ways. Anyway, I have to do homework now :'( but as soon as I've finished I'm reading again!
| Earth's-Only-Saviour chapter 32 . 9/3/2013
Basilisk... The Basilisk attacked Hermione and Sirius. TOM YOU BASTARD (sorry for saying that word)! WHY DID YOU TELL THE BASILISK TO ATTACK THEM?! Who took the diary? We seem to be entering the Land of Cliffhangers right now. LOVE THIS!