|Reviews for Revenge for a Smile|
| Iggy - Essence of Angst chapter 1 . 6/5/2005
Not bad. Be careful about your typos, though. :points at the last paragraph: You may want to fix that sentence. "Alright Kohaku, I have a new mission for new."
Other than that, the emotions were genuine. Nothing overly dramatic, but they were there. However, next time you want to put in someone else's thoughts in italics, put line dividers. It's a less confusing read and that way people will know that you are changing POVs.
As a last constructive criticism, make sure you add -some- background to the characters. Not their personalities, but where they are to create a sense of theme for that part of the story. That thing with Kohaku and Naraku seemed a bit random.
| Magic Kaito chapter 1 . 3/20/2005
Hey, I know that episode! Yay for the internet, lol. You know, this is something I've thought about, actually. The fact that Kohaku knows nothing about Miroku and Sango. I'm quiet interested in seeing where you take this!