Reviews for shadow ninja boy
fire god101 chapter 1 . 10/1/2005
awesome story. it is on my favorites list!update soon!
vashfreak chapter 2 . 9/4/2005
My eyes bleed. Can you say OOC to the max? and wtf is wrong with Kakashi? He KNOWS how strong Naruto is. Pissing his ...this is the worst fanfiction I have ever laid eyes on.
bd chapter 1 . 7/26/2005
Love it _ super awesome. cont. writing more.

don't feel bad about the misspelled words everybody makes mistakes _ ~
Katsugi chapter 5 . 7/20/2005
U mean he has to leave the kitsune women...? That's mess up... other that I am prefectly fine with the rest and Naruto seems to be going pimp...
Pite chapter 1 . 7/20/2005
LOL funny but there are few Vocubalar mistaces
therealme chapter 6 . 7/20/2005
Good chapter, he's too powerful. anyway

Uzumaki whirlwind

kage shadow

ho fire

bushin replication

uzumaki hokage bushin
Zeki chapter 1 . 5/13/2005
I just wanted to point a few things out in the name of constructive criticism:

- Spell check can help immensely. You have a lot of misspelled words scattered throughout your story. Even if you don't write in word, just copy and paste it in to check for spelling and grammar mistakes. It’ll catch a lot of things you didn’t notice while typing.

- If you're unsure of Japanese words don't use them, the use of random Japanese words really brings down a story. Suffixes like “–kun” I can understand but words such as “kawaii” that could easily be replaced, should be replaced. It'll make the story sound much better.

- You can find the spellings of characters names on any Naruto fan site. Try checking out a site like to help fix misspelled character names.

- Make sure to start a new paragraph each time a different person talks. Breaking up paragraphs helps readers follow the story more easily.

Best Wishes,


Un-Chibbie chapter 5 . 4/26/2005
Awesome, yet another chapter well done. My friend and I can't wait to see what happends. I am also very intrigued with the whole naruto fox creation, nice, plus i can't wait to see what happends with Yuki and Temmari fighting over the new Naruto more than the old. Will he get both or just one?
horriblemonster chapter 5 . 4/25/2005
Umm...good story so far, I like it, but you definitely need an editor. Most of this story is run on sentences and you dont really use puctuation. Little Spelling Problems:





( didnt specify when you went into a flashback, i didnt even notice it at first)

I like your story though, the storyline(is there even one?) is fine, its just the grammar that is ur problem.
Un-Chibbie chapter 1 . 4/14/2005
Great fic going, i just started reading these about a week ago and my friend suggested your fic. I will review some more some other time because my teach is coming. Anyways, Great Work Keep them coming.
crazy-antman chapter 4 . 4/9/2005
update soon!

and... oh yeah, isn't Sakura supposed to be like...

busy? i mean, she has to take out the poison too right?
Dragon Man 180 chapter 3 . 4/2/2005
Poor Hinata, she's got alot of competition when Naruto returns to Konoha. Hehe, Kakashi deserved to get beat up by the girls for being such a pervert, they should steal and burn his books also.
Lord Kenshin Himura chapter 2 . 3/28/2005

I am loosing at the story here... have they reached Sand already? Or are they taking a break?
Dragon Man 180 chapter 2 . 3/23/2005
Interesting developements, but doesn't Kakashi know a few low level water jutsu that he could use to get some water?
omnidragon82 chapter 1 . 3/22/2005
liking it . i would say it would be better to stay as a nartem
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