Reviews for shadow ninja boy
Dragon Man 180 chapter 1 . 3/22/2005
You do need to improve your gramar and sentance structure. Try starting a new paragraph each time a new person starts to make this story easier to read. Temari smacking Naruto when he was thinking about Ramen was nice, but Kakashi almost got reduced to a quivering pile of bruised flesh by the two girls was even better.
Lord Kenshin Himura chapter 1 . 3/22/2005
0.o

I think you should remake the last part with Naruto breathing hard a bit. Then get bitch slapped by both girls and well then he says again "What the hell was that for? can't a man suffer for water?". Bah maybe you should add it next chapie. Good story anyway .
Patch5129 chapter 1 . 3/22/2005
Interesting story so far, good humor between Naruto and the girls. I do have one suggestion. Edit this chapter and future ones so there is some spacing, its current state makes it hard to read, and i accidentally skipped a line here and there, getting lost. Just a suggestion.

And should Kakashi be so surprised that Naruto knows Rasengan? He did see Naruto try to use it on Sasuke. The Yodaime was also his sensei, so he should know how powerful it is.
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