|Reviews for Past perfect|
| catangel56 chapter 1 . 3/30/2005
Hey your story is interesting. I like this explanation of Lauren's sudden disappearance from Winslow.
However, structually, it would make it a lot easier to read if you started a new paragraph everytime someone speaks. Also, your sentences tend to ramble a little bit and there are some unneccessary information.
Other than that, great story! You've got a really good cliffhanger. Update soon!