|Reviews for Under the Surface|
| IzzyFaust chapter 14 . 12/18/2009
it's a bit confusing and long winded but i like it please update soon i'm dieing to know what happens next _
| Margot chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
Hi. Um. I guess it's seems like a good story. It would be better if one could actually understand it without having to go look in a dictionary every two words. And believe you me, I have a pretty decent vocabulary - imagine what it's like for an idiot to read this?
Does anyone actually speak like this in person? No one likes a story that's too wordy or too hard to understand. I, for one, and many more, definitely do /not/ appreciate the extensive use of words that seem like they're from another language.
I also believe that when writing in a character's POV, you're supposed to use their personality and being. Rikku, for sure, does /not/ speak like this. I'm certain she doesn't think like this either. Just a suggestion: don't try and sound sophisticated. All it does is aggravate your readers.
| K-Jaye chapter 1 . 12/15/2006
Ok, I totally had to review for chapter one, because doesn't allow more than one review for a chapter. Like, WTF?*screws up face* Anyways, I was rereading the story and I wanted to give you a review, cause 1) you can never have too many and 2) I still love this story to bits! And yeah, I decided to use the review to check in on you, since I haven't seen you around in, like, AGES! (ok, ages is a bit of a stretch...) Anyways, hope all is well! *huggles*
| escaperoutes chapter 14 . 6/18/2006
Hello! Good day to you as well! _ Wonderful story! I started reading it recently and found that I couldn't stop reading it! I'm slightly addicted. Well, not slightly. I'm addicted. _ Anyway, do not worry about not updating soon. It is okay. We can wait [although I can't because I'm impatient] but I will try my hardest to wait. XD Ok, I sound weird. Well, again a good day to you and keep up the good work! _
| skatterkat chapter 14 . 4/19/2006
XD That was brilliant! I love the way you write, you really 'GET' language, ya know? It's great to read! Cookie for you! *twinkles*
| Guest chapter 14 . 3/21/2006
WRITE MORE! This story rocks my Cat in the Hat book! O_O...lol!
| rianess chapter 14 . 2/21/2006
I just wqanted to say, having read all the chapters of 'Under the Surface' so far, I think your wtory is great, really great. I think your writing style is wonderful. I love the wit, the imagery and the crazy ramblings. (I do that myself sometimes, is it a British thing?). I haven't laughed out loud like that for a long time!
Please continue with what you are doing, I'm sorry I can get more specific. Thanks for posting such a brilliant story, I can't wait to read the rest.
| cupcakegirl chapter 11 . 2/4/2006
I really enjoy your story (all though isn't loading all of the chapters properly, gah), but sometimes I find it really difficult to follow with all the compound sentances. Maybe I'm just stupid, but ah, it hurts my head.
| Teh Pwnful Kiwi chapter 14 . 1/15/2006
Awesome fanfic! Yet another great Gippal/Rikku one I've seen. I really hope you'll update soon -adds to favorites- Yush, once again great job! You have a lot of talent -is in so much suspense- Hmm I wish I had a Chocobo cookie...-drifts off in thought of that- Yum. XD Update!
-Your Newst Fan, Kiwi :3
| Mandamirra10 chapter 14 . 1/13/2006
O my...I am so mad at myself for taking so long to find this fic. I love love love it!
All of it is very well written everyone is in character *sigh* i can't wait for more. I love GIppal/Rikku stories
| K-Jaye chapter 14 . 1/11/2006
...Ek! Sorry I haven't reviewed until now! I don't get online that much (as someone else is usally hogging it) so this may be a sort of rushed review. Loved ch. 14, loved it all! lol As to what I can request from you, I have no clue. Maybe a cameo in your story? I could be some random homeless person that asks Rikku for some spare change. lmao! Ok, maybe not. Now I must go!
| Anyhoodle77 chapter 14 . 1/3/2006
hey i like this story, a nice combo of fluff, and huumor, keep going i really i like this!
| Selffie chapter 14 . 1/3/2006
'... to talk of many things. Of shoes, and (ships?)(seels?) (scissors?) and ceiling wax, of cabbages, and kings!...'
She's not his... sister?
She's his mother, right? (cackles)
Good chapter, I don't hate Gippal, he can't help that he's a loser. Some people are just born like that... We should pity them, really.
Oh! New obsession: Dance Dance REVOLUTION.
| Jezzi chapter 14 . 1/3/2006
Once I got past all of the stuff that completely threw me off track, I loved it. Great feeling at the end... Does he not know what he did wrong?
| Selffie chapter 1 . 12/9/2005
I remembered to review again!
They better be siblings
God, Gippal pisses me off, I hate him so much, I wish he'd just burn in- oh, ice cream truck!