|Reviews for Come What May|
| CharlieDawie chapter 1 . 7/18
I only read the first few chapters but decided to quit because I didn't quite like it. You make a lot of grammatical errors and write superficially about your character's thoughts and emotions. I think I would have liked more depth. For example, their 'big night of passion' is only a couple of paragraphes and very factually written. Too bad it's not for me, I liked the description. I bet there are loads of other people who do like it however. Definitely keep writing!
| Emz Fan chapter 37 . 9/30/2016
This was one of the most amazing stories I have ever read!
| Qaz chapter 3 . 8/1/2016
WHAT KIND OF PASSIN IS THAT
| singdiva1794 chapter 37 . 1/7/2013
This was a great story. Not too long or short but just perfectly. I like how you extended it all the way to their death. I like that you married Lupin off and also that you were creative in the reasoning behind Pettigrew's betrayal. Actually I think that this was the most creative story that still stuck to the canon story. :) Brilliant.
| firequartz chapter 37 . 11/17/2012
All in all I found this story very well written. I liked the fact that it didn't drag by or too much drama. Of course they did suffer some amount, hence the Prophecy, but you didn't have it in every chapter. I liked your version of how Peter would turn against his friends. I know none of us like Peter, but he would have still been good friends with them all to have been the Secret Keeper!
My only criticism is that you spelt Wales "Whales"! I do get very annoyed when people spell names wrong, or when they say "fall" when in England we call it Autumn. After all it is an English book! Also we don't do graduation here, we have Leaver's balls or something similar.
Other than that, I did love this story, I hope you are not upset by those comments, I just thought I'd let you know!
| Inez chapter 37 . 7/29/2011
You've written an amazing story, it's just so sad that James and Lily had to die. I especially liked the part where you wrote in Harry's perspective.
Once again, I cried when I read the last chapter 'cause I know my favourite characters die. Are you going to write another story on James and Lily?
Lots of love
| arquent chapter 37 . 7/28/2011
I'm so sad its over...
| arquent chapter 36 . 7/28/2011
"He left, somehow knowing, deep in his heart, it would be the last time he would ever see James or Lily again..."
Damn. I started crying then):
| SaRaPiE chapter 37 . 3/17/2011
This story is fantastic! I loved how you actually kept a good plot going and it made sense. The last chapter was really sad :( good work!
| Essie chapter 37 . 1/1/2011
OH MY GOD I LOVED THIS STORY! I LOVED HOW YOU ENDED IT I LOVED THE BEGINNING I LOVED EVERYTHING ABOUT IT THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING THIS YOU HAVE TALENT
| Marauderette96 chapter 37 . 10/30/2010
I loved it! This was written very well and captured my attention from start to finish. Well done! :P
| vampiremuggle chapter 37 . 6/27/2010
omg this is so good! I've never read a James/Lily fic that is longer than 1 chapter...but this was REALLY good. I LOVE IT! And I still cried when Lily and James died even though I knew what was going to happen. And I actually shouted 'NO' when Sirius suggested the switch. haha. AMAZING STORY!
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| Dusty Miller chapter 37 . 5/7/2010
I’m getting more used to read stories within the category “Romance” (Lily and James are very much in love still)– even though this is a lot of Fantasy as well, concerning the fact that this is a Harry Potter story – and this sure is one of the stories that’s getting me even closer to liking those stories. Lately I’ve been reading more stories than writing them myself, and it’s kind of annoying, want to know why? I’m reading stories that are COMPLETELY the opposite – genre-wise – to the stories I’m writing. Like; I’m writing fanfiction, and not that much fiction – tried to before, but I’m removed all of it – and I read Harry Potter stories involving Lily and James (equals Romance) when I’m supposed to write stories involving Naruto and the characters Naruto and Minato as father and son (equals Family) . . . great isn’t it?
Anyway, enough of my gibberish, I’m here to leave a review, and I’m one of those people who enjoy to receive reviews with both positive and negative things about the story, so prepare yourself for some critique . . . I’m using three headlines to kind of . . . organise this review, and they’re going to be ‘negative’, ‘positive’ and ‘questions & wonderings’. I’ll most likely not write more than three or four matters beneath each headline, oh, and one more thing; I’m not going to check this review for spelling mistakes, you’ve got deal with me, and also; non-native speaker, but who gives a darn nowadays?
-You’re awesome with grammar, spelling, capitalization, as well as with the details, descriptions, emotions and realistic writing. It’s something I appreciate with stories, and I get so . . . bothered somehow . . . when I read stories you can’t even understand, but really, it’s understandable as well. You don’t know the authors’ origins, and maybe the author is new and . . . there are so many other things; nevertheless, to me it’s a criterion that the grammar and spelling is relatively correctly used.
-You had no explicit sex! Freaking hell yeah! In my opinion sex is overrated, so for someone to write out ALL the sex scenes with ALL the details is quite unnecessary, and I think that’s something to think about concerning your future writing: do not add sex scenes. Sex is not allowed on FP or FFN and it actually pisses me off that people add it in their stories. I’ve got nothing against sex, though if I were an admin on this site, I’d probably report the stories at once . . . but that’s not how things are . . . by being an author here, you’ve got certain responsibilities, and you’ve got to be a good example to other authors as well as readers. You can get an AdultFF account and put an uncut version over there, where you’ve got the sex, but NOT here. This is not something you can blame on; “But everybody else have sex in their stories” or “Since so many people write and read sex themselves, why would it be a problem to add it in my stories?” It’s not about that; it’s about rules as well as the fact that this is a fiction site, not a pornography site.
-You wrote it extremely realistically with them dying, confronting Voldemort three times, having friends but who were killed etc. and that’s something I enjoy with Lily/James stories more than you can imagine. I want things to be levelheaded and not too OOC. If I read an AU I’ve made a decision myself, but when reading a story about Lily and James in Hogwarts it’s great to be able and read a story that “could have happened in the real story, but we don’t know if it actually did”. It adds a lot of suspension to it all. Sure, I’d rather see Lily and James alive, but that’s for another story . . .
- It’s “angry with” and not “angry at” when you’re pissed and someone. Like; “Why are you angry with me? Have I done something wrong?” It’s a minor thing, and I know this because I study grammar like freaking hell, so yeah. I’m not that surprised, a lot of people mess up on this part.
-Er, what else . . . ty~ypos. Don’t you love them? Just like you love a pain in the arse . . . I can understand why typos appear though – for it to be flawless and contain no mistakes whatsoever is quite inevitable, though, that doesn’t matter – I like it when there are some mistakes. It shows me that this person likes to write, for fun, and is not a perfectionist who writes for the publicity. Something connected with this, is that your English is mixed, you’re using both British and American English, and I’m not sure if you’re trying to use British English or if you’re a non-native speaker who mix the languages together. However, there are some words that are spelt in American but mean exactly the same in British, but one thing that’s different. An American cookie is a biscuit in British, a British cookie is more like scones or something . . . there are other words like this, and expressions, so I was a bit lost from time to time . . . AE vs. BE . . .
QUESTIONS & WONDERINGS:
a) How did you come up with this plot? Did you get your inspiration from an event in real life; did you read a story to get some inspiration, or what happened? I know that this may look like a strange question, but I’d like to know as a growing author, as well as a reader of this story. I want to know how you thought. Stalker waning i.e.
b) You know if we’ll see more of you in the future, or have you given up on fiction writing? I can see the potential of becoming a potent author so don’t let your talents get wasted. Doesn’t matter if it’s fiction writing or not, oh bloody— write a book or whatever. You sure do have some talents. I did notice though, that you’ve got some other stories in your gallery, we’ll see if I plan on reading them or not – I wish there were more than 24 hours a day. This was written a while ago, so I think your writing skills have improved some, but that doesn’t make me less enthusiastic about reading those stories, perhaps a bit cynic . . . since some authors develop as an author and all that shit, but then; bam. It’s not for the better. So yes, I hope it’s for the better with you, not to scare you or anything, but I’m just saying.
c) How old are you really? Because to me it seems as if you’re at least in your mid twenties – I bet you’re like . . . 13-ish merely because I said that – and concerning the structure of the story you’re amazing with your writing.
That’s all I’ve got to say, and I’ve just very glad that you’ve written this story. I’ve said it once before, but really; this is a good story but some parts were just weird. Btw, I’m too lazy (YES! I am lazy; I think we agree on that, hmm?) to go back and look for errors in this reviews – even though I left a certain negative comment about this . . . damn – so you’ll just have to bear with me today. I’ve got a lot to do tomorrow, so it’s sleep that’s next on my list of things to do. Dream. Live. Read. Write. All for fiction. Cheers.
Btw, it was fascinating to see James and Lily so devoted, and if you know stories that are similar to this one, please let me know. I'm captivated.
| h0lyheadharpies chapter 37 . 9/1/2009
For being a pre-Deathly Hallows story, this is brilliant! The facts match up really well considering you didn't have all the information at the time.
| YourLightWillShine chapter 1 . 4/7/2009
LOVE IT! Especially the way Lily doesn't completely hate James.
I'll be reading . . . . .