Reviews for Dying to dance ON HOLD! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() this is good! please continue! |
![]() ![]() Heej, I like The Story ... Continue ...! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Take off hold PLEASE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Come on Update! hehehehe Hurry up already! hehehe see I did reveiw and tell you the hurry up! So hurry up! - Bye bye, xwolfdevilx -walks away laughing- |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is really good! Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, nice story. :D Seeing how so many people dislike Anzu, you know? Dying to Dance... In health class at one point of time, we watched a movie called Dying to Dance about a girl who was aspiring to be a ballerina. She faced the same problems that your summary implies that Anzu will face. When writing, I suggest that you don't start a new paragraph after every two or three sentences. I use a new paragraph to start a new topic or to accentuate a certain sentence or idea. (EX: They drove by huge billboards (and) buildings of about the same size as the KC tower back at home in Domino. But life seemed so rushed. Everybody was in a hurry. Nobody seemed to have time or took the time to take some much needed rest. Everybody seemed stressed, worn out. At least, that’s how it felt like to Anzu.) There are a few spelling and grammar errors that a third-person narrator can avoid by proofreading. (EX: “You really shouldn’t have though!” taking out the contents of the bag. should be "You really shouldn't have, though!" said Anzu, taking out the contents of the bag.) Other than those that I can find, this looks like it will be a very promising story! :D Seeya! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like so it will be a Seto/Tea story |
![]() ![]() Hey i like your story. keep it up, i'm really inetrested in what'll happen next. will you reveal the pairing some time soon(if there is one)? |
![]() ![]() ![]() aww, that was so emotional! Anyway, she finally gets to pursue her dream and go to New York! But I can just imagine the pain she would feel at leaving her friends. Update soon please! |