this fanfiction is so

bad! ive NEVER...NEVER EVER...

read a so bad story i just read it

because at the beginning i thought it would

bcome better

but i was wrong.

you should not write a story again!

i mean it real its so bad!

its a shit story!

So Numisma...You say the characters are OOC? Well how much do we real know about these characters? Give it thought. We actually know very little. As for the self-insertive commentary, well that adds color to the fic. And Zaurak has a beta reader...Me. And you do not write for others, you write for yourself. Stories are meant to reflect the writer on some level. Besides. Zaurak doesn't smoke. Zaurak gets a smoothie from me though. Sorry sib, but I feel I have to defend you here. Well see yah!

this would be a much more promising piece of fanfiction were it not for the fact that you really need to keep things a bit less snarkily OOC and get rid of all those pieces of authorial self-insertive commentary. oh, and get a beta reader. overall this wasn't the worst i've ever seen, but the narrative style is very childish and inappropriately and fourth-wall-breakingly self-reflective at times, and your understanding of punctuation is very much lacking.

nice try, but no cigar. i stopped reading halfway through this chapter. too bad.

This is the first time I've ever said this.. The chapter lengths are PERFECT. Nice and long, but not so long they get boring. Great stuff. Not only are they a good length, they are absolutely fabulously done, very descriptive, though the first few chapters have a few 'innapropriate' Author Notes in the middle of sentances. All in all, a great job, and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Pros: Great storyline, All characters are in character, great chapter length, descriptive, lots of other things.

Cons: Annoying Author Notes in chapters 1 and 2.

Overall score: 9.5/10

SpasticDjinn

The Djinni of Djinn

Supreme ruler of the Bathroom-Sponge addicts.

Lord of the secondary reference to overburnt sliced toast club.

hey again, it's me, L-Virus. i had my penname changed. anyway, I wanted to say thanks for the review on The New Task. didn't think i'd ever get more than 3 reviews!

hopefully you'll update soon, this is really getting good.

*glares at ShadeXH* watch it with those knives or you'll face a wrath darker than anything you've ever faced!

alright, i'm kidding. (:

WHEN WILL WE FIND OUT ARA'S PLAN!

Sorry, I felt like being that kind of reviewer who asks questions thatt won't be answered. :P

So, Alex is coming in soon, god, he is one of meh favorite characters. (Besides Felix) And Kraden better not come in for a long, long while.

*Sticks out dual shinobi trowing knives*

ISAAC WILL END UP WITH MIA!

I reread the previous chapter. Please, try not to kill off any canon characters. Either fans of the the character will spam you, or you lose the chance of making a good sequel, OR it shows up as a let's-defy-canon act.

This was a good chapter, and I'm afraid I have no idea what onomatopoeia to use for flashes of light. Maybe 'Flash!'? Or 'Zing!' (I don't know where that came from...)

your welcome for not pressuring you. (:

i really don't like to leave hints at what pairings i want, that's a little desperate. (no offense meant to anyone) in the words of myself, you do what you want and this story will still be on my favorites list.

about the pairings, i pretty much like the IsaacSheba pairing above all others, but as i can easily say that there won't be any of that in this fic, i suppose a dose of IsaacJenna would suffice. but don't take this as a suggestion, go ahead and do what you want.

speaking of which, what do you think of the IS pairing? don't hold back, i won't get mad. (:

see ya later.

That was an interesting chappie! I, for some odd reason, like Isabella although I barely know anything about her. So far, this fic is kind of leaning towards steamshipping but i wont jump to conclusions. Anyway, that was a nice chapter. Good work and update soon.

Kodoku

*Prays for Mudshipping*

Cool, another chapter. Even if it was pretty short, it was still good, and it still moved the plot forward some. Also, I didn't notice many typos in this chapter, so that's a good thing. Y'know, to avoid typos in the future, you could probably run a spellchecker. That would at least catch run-together words.

Also, thanks for the review on my fic. I loved the phrase in your review, "creepily effeminite Felix". That was funny.

Okay, update soon, kthxbye! :P

I like this. Its very good. The fact with Ara and his jupiter powered necklace is cool. I want to see more.

hey. this is coming along real good. don't worry about the ooc of Felix. anyone flames you and they'll face my dark wrath. (:

normally, i despise the mudshipping pairing, but i won't tell you what to put, you do what you want, and this story will still be on my favorites list.

on another note, in an answer to your review to Wrath of Dark Alchemy, yes it is an I/S pairing. it's called Sandstorm shipping, so you know. anyway, hope to see more and i hope you like the next chapter.

Another amazing chapter! Man, if you had inspiration for another chapter you should continue!

It's great as usual, and yes, Ara seems to be not so perfect now. The Stu elements aren't near him for now. Good for you! Keep up the good work!

There are several grammar errors, and some words are stuck together o_o Neither you nor your beta reader spotted them?

I look forward to seeing the next chapter.

Hey sib! Good work with the story! And for you others there... Do NOT threaten her.

Update soon...yes...and good job...

Kodoku

*prays for mudshipping*