Reviews for Complicated Beginning
Kitty in the Box chapter 10 . 6/1
Oh man, the saiyan saga was a major game changer. I loved how you ended this to as it ushers in that saga. i felt really sad for Chichi though. all that loss and trauma would be more than enough to drive anyone insane but she remained strong. I love how you depicted their beginnings and it helps flesh out their characters in such a way you can't help but cheer for them all the way.
MysticChemyst chapter 2 . 5/4
Great! Love it so far! There are just a few mistakes that keep cropping up that need some attention:

1) you tend to consistently use "your" when you actually need "you're," the contracted form of "you are". For example: it should be "you're too much." When it's done the other way, it reads incorrectly as the person (Goku, in this case) possessing something called a "Too Much" and turns it into a sentence fragment.

2) I THINK (of course, I can't be positive) that when you are using "generally" you actually want "genuinely." The first means in general or on average while the latter means truly or honestly.

3) Unless it's being done to sound more colloquial and casual, it really should be "would have" and not "would of." The second is incorrect grammatically for a number of reasons I won't go into, here.

There are a few other little mistakes here and there, but those are the ones I noticed as being more consistent. I also don't want to make my list too long, or it might seem like I don't like your story, and that just isn't the case!

Thank you for all your hard work! I'm currently only done reading the second chapter, but I've really enjoyed what you've written so far, especially your characterizations!

Alexis chapter 10 . 3/18
At first, I had passed by this story and hadn't even given it the chance it truly deserved, but I'm so glad I decided to go back are read it. The way you characterized the characters was amazing and it was beautifully written. This is an amazing story
LoveLenaaxo12 chapter 10 . 2/25
I absolutely loved this story. Beautifully writtenI loved how it's written over time and not just all at once &a dragging. It was absolutely perfect. Characters are genuineeverything just synced together well
rimera chapter 10 . 1/17
I thought you should know, this is my tenth time re-reading this fic, and I still love it!
Verynicegirl211 chapter 10 . 3/11/2016
Aww so sad :'''')
ask.again.later chapter 4 . 11/21/2015
What a wonderful description of marriage and love in general, Goku's naivety makes things so clear! Plus, you write so structured and have such an even flow, it's beautiful to read. It feels like it's really happening, very realistically described. What's best though, is that I can agree with the words you put into Chichi's mouth, what she tells Goku about marriage and husbands and wives and love. You wrote about their careful advance in to a real relationship without falling into stereotypes or gender roles.
Also, regarding he characters we're dealing with here, you give a very realistic idea of their married life together, especially during the first few months/years, when everything is still new and unfamiliar (more so for them than for a regularly married couple) and they have to get accustomed to this type of life.

Sorry if my sentences are disjointed and kind of incoherent - it's late here. But you deserve a much better review because this is awesome and you don't find gold nuggets like these in the giant flea market that is the internet. I am so impressed with your writing.
You Light The Sky chapter 1 . 8/11/2015
Very sweet!
FanaticallyInLove chapter 10 . 6/11/2015
That was the most beautiful and satisfying Goku and Chichi story I've ever read. You have an absolutely amazing way with words. I haven't cried like that over a fanfiction in a long while, bravo you have an amazing talent!
roku1397 chapter 10 . 4/13/2015
This is so touching...
roku1397 chapter 8 . 4/13/2015
Yes I agree ! This is sooo cute
roku1397 chapter 7 . 4/13/2015
This is sooo... beautiful!
roku1397 chapter 1 . 4/12/2015
This is so sweet!
BeasCup chapter 10 . 3/12/2015
Your interpretation of their relationship was wonderful. I loved the beginning and I love how you provided the depth in both goku and chichis character that was not explored in the anime. Thank you for writing! I enjoyed your work. :)
Kurami Rocket chapter 10 . 8/2/2014
Goku u freakin baka. I always hated how he would leave too. I know he finally accepts and becomes proud of his saiyan heritage, it's part of his character development. But him loving to fight, intensifies too much, sure he does it to become strong to protect those he loves, but he also does it for selfish reasons.

There is no doubt he loves his family and friends, it's why he dies for them twice, but well it's the price of being married to a saiyan, a warrior, a hero. It's in his blood, but also who he is. Furthurmore saiyans as stated by Toriyama have never been ones to care for family, of course there are exceptions. Goku choosing to remain dead, I think was both selfish, so he could train in Otherworld and unselfiah, to keep his family safe cause he truly thought he was a danger to them. He really had put thought in his decision.

And he realizes this too, that he IS selfish. He tells Gohan before dying in the jap ver, 'Tell your mom I'm sorry. I've been selfish and given her hard times' But well it's who Goku is, and this does give him a sense of complexity in a way. Again though, there's no doubt he loves his wife, but seeing as earth is in danger, since there is always someone stronger, since he won't always be around to defend it, he has to train. While at the same time enjoying fighting.

A lot of people say Goku is a simple guy with little to no development, but this just isn't the case. Goku is, can be a complex character. It's what makes him interesting, but in a way not a hero too in his past decisions letting enwmies live juat so he can fight them again, knowing it's a huge risk. I could go more on this, but this is long enough.

Anyways, your story was fantastic and really wish Toriyama could write something like this and make it cannon cause dbz really is much more than just fighting, then like some people think.
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