|Reviews for Monkey Master|
| WalkInThePark chapter 1 . 11/7/2012
I. Love. It. So. Much.
| Memma546 chapter 1 . 9/1/2010
Worst thing written? I disagree alot. It well written and I hope you do more!
| the stone tiger chapter 1 . 8/29/2009
lol i can totally see kim standing there like O_O
| Donteatacowman chapter 1 . 8/30/2008
Pretty good. You asked for constructive criticism, though, so: everything happened too fast. The story finished before it started. I'd try to slow it down a bit. Otherwise, good!
| Sharksbean chapter 1 . 1/28/2007
i will tell you what is missing from this, an entire backstory to explain how they got there in the first place and also explains just what the heck is going on. and for the story at hand there is a plot hole you didnt notice, Kim knows about Ron's mystical monkey power lol and you sorta made monkey fist sound gay when he told Ron" I will have you" lol
| thsunami chapter 1 . 11/6/2005
your to harsh to yourself. It had a nice bigging and the story is to short to really know where you want to take it but it has a nice bing it now noly needs ever incresing intsion maybe some comedy (your choice) and what really matters not the biggening but the end keep up the tragedy and darknees and make longer and you could have a great story here. Ill be waiting to see how it ends
| Netherwood chapter 1 . 9/14/2005
I bow to your superior skills. This is a perfect anime scene!
| hidden watcher chapter 1 . 8/30/2005
it's too short thats why
| 3VAD127 chapter 1 . 7/7/2005
Okay, here's what I think you can do: Instead of just rushing into the super-cool go-get-the-bad-guy scenes, you can try and develop the story. Explain how Kim, Ron, and Monkey Fist all got together in the same place and where they are. Are they in Japan? Bueno Nacho? Antarctica? Add how Ron or Monkey Fist retrieved the Lotus Blade from the school. Maybe even tell us what Monkey Fist's plot is. But in general, try and develop the story more. Add to it, review it, erase and do it all over again. I think you've got a really cool idea here, just try and develop it more. ;-)
| Kraven the Hunter chapter 1 . 4/12/2005
Don't feel too bad. The whole "bringing the dead back to life" thing is pretty cool actually.
| DragonGirl chapter 1 . 4/10/2005
O.O the plot thickens! great story! can't wait for the next exciting chapter!
| nyx chapter 1 . 4/9/2005
loving the healing powers!
need more por favor!
o i just rhymed...k/r action if u wouldnt mind
| seras 234 chapter 1 . 4/9/2005
nice... great job do more soon i love reading this stuff
| Blue ranger 1983 chapter 1 . 4/9/2005
p Liked it it was a little weird but i Liked wite more
| cyber dragoness master chapter 1 . 4/8/2005
good but to short more please