|Reviews for Child Again|
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 8 . 6/24/2013
Aww, that was cute. Yay for Cloud's mom making him solve the problems which led to cuteness. Wonderful work with this story.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 7 . 6/24/2013
That was a good plan. Yay for Sora telling Leon off for hurting Cloud's feelings. This was an interesting chapter, nice work.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 6 . 6/24/2013
What a chapter. First Sora got sick. Riku's protectiveness during that scene is cute. The teens did a great job with taking care of them. Glad to see they're back to normal, but the adorableness of them in child form was enjoyable. Good work with this chapter.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 5 . 6/24/2013
Nice chapter. Protective Leon is adorable, that's all I can say about that. It's cute how they comforted the kids during the storm.
Aww, the little bit of romance between Cloud and Leon is cute.
Great job with this chapter.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 4 . 6/24/2013
Such a cute chapter. I like the way the teens handled that guy who was trying to weasel them out of more money.
The bit about Kairi and Wakka is sweet as is their adorable baby. How nice that the guys offered to help them out.
Wonderful work with this chapter.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 3 . 6/23/2013
Another cute chapter. Riku is going to end up causing Cloud a heart attack before this story is done, huh? I have to say I'd have the same reaction if a child I babysat did that.
The phone conversation between Leon and Sora's mother has to be the funniest part here followed by Cloud questioning why he was having those kinds of conversations with her.
I also like Sora and Riku's random conversations. The best has to be: "Sora took his thumb out of his mouth and looked at Riku questioningly. "Ri-Ri, if they want clothes, why don't they just look in the dwesser?"
Riku shrugged. "I don't know. Grown ups are weird."
It's so cute and funny.
Nice job with this chapter.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 2 . 6/23/2013
A wonderful second chapter. It's interesting that it was by mistake that Cloud and Leon managed to create the first ever de-aging potion. Them taking care of a couple of children should be entertaining.
The boys sure are smart with how they managed to make the teens keep them together. Also the scene where Riku and Sora are making their own cereal was fun to read. I have to agree with Leon there at the end, they sure have some irresponsible parents.
Great job with this chapter.
| Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 1 . 6/23/2013
This sounds like an exciting story. You have a great set up here with a definite problem.
The pacing is good. You allow the reader to get to know the characters and their relationships, as well as the detail about Riku and Sora's irresponsible parents before even getting to the main problem. It allows the reader to get invested in your characters.
You have some good details and don't rush, which is something I praise you on. For instance the bit about the solution burning Riku and Sora and how it reacts to hot water is a nice detail that really adds to your story.
The ending of this chapter is perfect. The baby talk from the two boys is absolutely adorable. Then followed by Leon demanding Cloud to seek help shows the emergency of the scene.
Great work with this chapter.
| Artificially Faked chapter 8 . 11/20/2010
Aaaaawwww, sooo cute -mouthfoamsandgarbles-
| underhandlilies chapter 2 . 11/1/2010
Shh," Riku whispered. "Don't worry, Sor-Sor, we gonna stay together, ok?"
"But they saying that we not," Sora sniffed.
"Don't matter what grown up people say," Riku nodded firmly. "Either we stay together or I'll scream and scream until they let us."
XD I've been the recipient of this kind of conversation WAAAAAAAAY too many times for my liking. Awesome story thus far!
| Isolating chapter 8 . 11/23/2009
your story is AWSOME!
| Sickened Yaoi Fan chapter 8 . 9/7/2009
Wow…this fic was bad…I’ve read worse but this come close to taking the cake. Would it kill you to get someone to beta your stuff before you post it? I lost count after the first chapter on how many typos there were. And don’t even get me started on characterization, these characters were so completely out of character it’s not even funny.
The concept of having Riku and Sora as kids was interesting but poorly executed. Randomly shoving Cloud and Leon in to serve as their “parents” seemed to have no importance except to fulfill your own disturbing, childish fantasies. Also, it occurred to me that you have a fetish with teen parents in this fic, which is also sickening. Your fic shows that it’s okay to get pregnant and have a child while you are only a mere child yourself. It’s people like you that encourage the growth of the number of kids in orphanages because their parents have immaturely thrown them away.
Another disturbing thing you have written into your fic is how much of pedophile Ansem is. Are you trying to say that all teachers are lechers that would give anything to see their students naked? If so, then you really need to enter therapy.
And for the love of all things Kingdom Hearts! Cloud and Leon would never blush like little schoolgirls that just got asked out! They are characterized as being two hard asses that never let their emotions show. So how would the event of their friends being changed into toddlers turn those two into blushing, girly-guys?
And before anyone flames me about hating yaoi, let me tell you a little secret: I love yaoi, but this “thing” you call a fic is a horrendous example of what yaoi is.
| Purgatory of Endless Twilight chapter 8 . 8/17/2009
Wat a great story!
| singingstars chapter 8 . 7/17/2009
Hehe cuute :] I was kinda surprised when we found out that Sora and Riku HAVE been going out for a while
| singingstars chapter 7 . 7/17/2009
Who! Leon gets TOLD by SORA! XD & I love that Sora and Riku are making out in the corner. I can just imagine that while I take pictures of it on my phone !