|Reviews for The Legend of Uzumaki Naruto: A Beginning|
| CosmicKobal chapter 21 . 1/21
| ReignOfTheFlash24 chapter 11 . 1/18
Reminds me of indra and ashura when ashura got the clan head title and Indra didn't then Indra didn't betrayed ashura
| Mythicatalyst chapter 62 . 8/21/2016
This is an amazing story.
You have done a really, really great job.
Seriously, this story is pretty high up on my list of great Naruto fanfiction.
Thanks for the time you put into this!
| Guest chapter 27 . 6/27/2016
So Naruto doesn't even get a delicious blood elf, yet so far two of the most lovely ladies in his world are taken by non-humans. RECTIFY THIS ATROCITY! NARUTO NEEDS BLOOD ELF BOOTY!
| my 2 guys chapter 2 . 4/18/2016
that was good keep the chapters coming
| my 2 guys chapter 1 . 4/18/2016
that was good keep the chapters coming
| Annoy mouse chapter 3 . 2/15/2016
...you are aware that shadow clones are special in that they retain the full skills, personality, and memories of the users, right? They can act independently, use jutsu of their own, take initiative, dodge things, etc
They also have a copy of whatever the user has on them. Like, say, explosive notes and kunai. Naruto has now used up an explosive note and a kunai, possibly more, when he could have had his clones use their copies instead.
Using a technique through his clones is imaginative but ultimately kinda silly, since they could just use the techniques themselves anyway, and with the link they have with the original they have some amount of telepathic understanding of his orders. Plus, you know, they are duplicates of him and so think in exactly the same way.
If he was using elemental clones, then having him order them about and use jutsu through them would make a little more sense, except even they can use jutsu on their own and have limited independence.
Having his clones dispel so as not to take hits is utterly silly. They'd either dodge just like him, attack back or take the hits and dispel but slow the momentum of the attacks. Nothing is gained from having them dispel themselves in this or any other combat situation, as popped clones send them chakra and memories back to him regardless (unless the attack drains/seals away chakra, that is the only situation it would be better to have them dispel themselves rather than being hit).
The idea is interesting, but needs a little work. Having him understand the language is fine but maybe less emphasis on it. Have him take it for granted that they'd speak the same language and not bat an eye when it turns out he's right.
Probably better to have a translating magick in effect somehow, maybe the talisman or whatever, but so long as it isn't remarked upon having the same language can be glossed over.
ALL CAPS SPEAKING GETS REALLY ANNOYING VERY QUICKLY, ESPECIALLY WHEN IT IS JUST COMPLAINING AND RANDOM DEMON-Y THINGS. PERHAPS IT MIGHT BE BETTER TO TRY MERELY BOLD WORDS INSTEAD.
Naruto with ranged jutsu wins. With his crazy amounts of chakra, stamina, regeneration of everything and the Kyuubi constantly supplying him with more of everything even passively, and huge boosts when needed, his army of shadow clones (which should be numbering in the hundreds for casual battles, since he created probably a thousand but at least several hundred when fighting against Mizuki, and that was without the Kyuubi helping or any further strength development. And his terrible chakra control at the time, too) should be spamming them out for situations like this.
Create a few dozen clones, all spread out and hanging back, all firing off ranged jutsu, done.
| Billy JB II chapter 57 . 1/1/2016
To be fair, the revelation ALSO loses much of it's impact for people sufficiently familiar with wow lore, who knew perfectly well who "Lady Katrana Prestor" was before she was even introduced. It seems it would be most effective on those who battled the boss but never paid attention to NPC text or lore in general. The reveal is well executed, however, and she was clearly a villain, if not obviously that KIND of foe.
| Billy JB II chapter 27 . 12/30/2015
It's a shame I'm reading this long after it came out. I could have voted for the creature of devastating power, terrifying size, and implausible stealth: the devilsaur!
| DarksiderForever chapter 41 . 9/6/2015
| DarksiderForever chapter 34 . 9/5/2015
Jiraya is technically stronger than Orochimaru.
| DarksiderForever chapter 31 . 9/5/2015
I think Captain Blood is also my favorite enemy choosing to leave in the arms of the sea knowing he was immortalized by a scar. It is quite amazing actually. He so Far is my Fave baddie!
| Guest chapter 33 . 8/18/2015
Yore Omake of Sia's fitting punishment sucks Dick.
| Duncan0Idaho chapter 5 . 5/13/2015
Again, Skills Naruto does not happens to have in his repertorie. Whats the problem with the Rasengan and Shadow clones? Both are diverse moves that are still pretty useful. It would also make Naruto limited in his approach to combat, needing to grow and invent new stuff. As it is now you are performing what tvtropes calls asspull.
| Duncan0Idaho chapter 4 . 5/13/2015
Why Naruto knows a Katon Jutsu? He never employed elemental ninjutsu until Kakashi gave him the paper and Naruto developed the Rasenshuriken.
Also Naruto has a base Wind Affinity, so performing fire jutsu so easily should be outside of his scope, it would have fit better considering his skillset to use the mass shadow clone jutsu and have him beat the crap of out of them.