|Reviews for Failure?|
| DarkLighter911 chapter 1 . 4/15/2005
Another great look at the more...serious side of thier journey. And it ties in well with some of the other stories you've written...explaing the conection between Collete and Sheena and such.
50 ToS fics...and to think i'm having truble getting one written! Keep it up!
| Ilvinaeda chapter 1 . 4/15/2005
Haha...rambling emails? No way...never, EVER, think that they are a bother.
If anything, they are quite the opposite...as I do love to read. And as a story is set, there's only so much you can glean from it before you realize that it will never change.
Reading email is something that has really struck me in the past few months...between you, KK, and ObviousMan, it's really fun to read the various things that you say in your emails...because it's never just the same. _ It's fun to read your reactions to different things, and to hear opinions...makes writing a truly interactive experience.
Anyhow, as to your story...
Your story was quite interesting. You have a good way of bringing up little points that most people either ignore or overlook...things like the Sylvarant peoples' resentment toward Colette. Sure, in the game, they say some hateful things...but in reality, she probably has endured worse than words for her actions...
And the part about Colette wanting to become stronger...they really should have added a little quest for her in the end of the game or something. A quest to help Colette overcome her self-hate and feel more positive about herself...the one thing she loves the least in the world. Wonderful introspect.
And once again, you add the element of fluff that is so befitting of your grand status...
/_\ *raising hands to show reverence*
Note: this is just my opinion, but I think the only thing this story really needs is an ending. It kinda ends...but not the way you normally end your stories. Feels like my browser cut off the last few lines of your story...as if there's another punch-line you had, but didn't include in the story...
Other than that, this is one of your classical pieces...and it is very good indeed.
On another note: you should try making a songfic, seriously. I think you can do it...after all, as long as the themes match, sticking in the lyrics between meaningful paragraphs or quotes really adds a touch to the story. _
Just adding the element of the music really changes the light in which a reader reads the piece...and you'd be surprised! There are some interesting things that could always be done...sometimes, a multiple-song songfic does the trick...like changing moods.
Lots of possibilities out there...just pick a song and start writing your feelings. _
And of course, keep it up! More fluff is needed in our world...and of course, the "Queen of Fluff" should lead the charge! _
Best of luck to you in the future. Until later...
| Story Weaver1 chapter 1 . 4/14/2005
Great fluffyness. You got some good insight into Colette's thoughts.
| E.S. Simeon chapter 1 . 4/14/2005
Very good. You have written this with lots of descriptiveness good work.