|Reviews for But That Was In Another Country|
| Byrnstar chapter 1 . 6/27/2005
*whistles* Whoa. You have a lovely, lovely knack for describing the 'real life' of characters in the FF7 world - I was laughing outloud at several points, and sad almost to the point of tears at others. Your depiction of the Heartless is chilling; very few fic manage to convey the potential horror of such creatures existing. Kudos!
| nn chapter 1 . 6/3/2005
hm... interesting. are you going to continue this? it would be interesting to see what happened to tifa, barett, and marlene and why they didn't make it to traverse town with cloud, yuffie and cid.
| cirruscastle chapter 1 . 5/12/2005
That was amazing, frankly.
The way you portrayed each of those characters was definitely the way they should have been portrayed in the game (with its really awful dialogue).
I'm not often interested in FFVII fanfiction for that very reason, people aren't able to move beyond the two dimensional game characters and make them into real people. You obviously never have that problem.
Beyond that, however, your idea is brilliant, everyone thinking Cloud is having another psychotic episode when he begins to see the Heartless. That was excellent.
And above all your language, the voice that you give to Yuffie, is witty and funny and bang on. Every time she makes an observation about something I am cheering at my computer, thinking, "yes, that's exactly the way it is."
One of my personal favourites was when Yuffie compared Cloud to a pinata.
It's amazing how you can write terrifying or heart-rending scenes and still make them funny. It's true to life as well, since the hysteria of laughter often accompanies, or is not far from, the hysteria of trauma.
| Cerebral Seductress chapter 1 . 5/4/2005
I just know this is going to be your best story yet, and also your most tragic. I almost hesitate to read it because I know you'll make the pain completely tangible. Unavoidable. *sniffle* But a little depression and angst is a small price to pay for reading another Guardian masterpiece. So I'll stick with it till the end. *salute* This chapter was gorgeous. Simply gorgeous. Your words are so rich that I can see every scene playing out before my eyes; the characters are perfect in their roles and Yuffie's cluelessness is heart-wrenching. I can't wait for the next chapter.
| Reese chapter 1 . 4/27/2005
Finally a good story going into the Avalanche Background of Yuffie and the others. This is great. I can't wait for the rest, provided there is more!
| SilverLocke980 chapter 1 . 4/25/2005
Amazing... you still do staggeringly good work, Guardian. You are, without a doubt, the greatest author on I have ever read, and maybe ever will read.
Excellent work. Nothing to criticize, but the hinted Barret/Tifa is wonderful, and what's even better, the sense of *family* that you put into your works is beautiful. I think they all would feel like family- like they were all the ones who belonged. In a perfect group, everybody kind of gets along, falls into their own roles- and make a real family to call home.
Yuffie claims she misses her dad, but somehow, I think she misses her real *family* more, even if she still has Cid, Cloud, and Aeris (though that last may hurt more than heal; how do you talk to the dead?) and the truth is, I'm just wonderfully glad you are writing this.
By the by... on "Thirteen Ways to Say Goodnight"...
Gudrun's Amarant's kid, isn't she?
Your Devoted, Lifelong Fan,
| Crimson Rose327 chapter 1 . 4/25/2005
Ah! I loved it! Yuffie is so funny!
"Wow! Clouds not fighting a postbox he mistook for Sephiroth!"
lmmfao! Update soon please!
| seventhe chapter 1 . 4/24/2005
aie, gods, if only i could write half as well as you, i'd die happily from happiness. your work is so full of laugh-out-loud images crossed with this ridiculous, wry sadness... i don't even know how to describe it, except that you're brilliant.
| auronette chapter 1 . 4/24/2005
This is excellent! I love the way you portray Yuffie and her point of view. I hope there's more.
| Lesatho chapter 1 . 4/23/2005
Very nice start off! I have to say, I absolutely adore the way you can write Yuffie in first person and keep so well to her personality.
Marlene makes me giggle. So adorable and spunky.
| IndigoHyacinth chapter 1 . 4/22/2005
Usually I don't like KH fictions that tetter away from the KH-AU canon-(I like the idea of Cid being forced to play a kind of pops to a 7-year old Yuffie, 13-year old Aerith, 12-year old Cloud, and sulky, 15-year old Squall)-but this is interesting, the way you are pulling their story off. Mixing the games together. The beginning was very amusing but a little random, seeing as Leon(Squall) hasn't shown much of himself so far. I like your take on Cid's conspicuous chubbiness in KH-though Yuffie's comment seemed a little unkind ;;. He's scary, yes, but not /that/ scary. And he does (did?) have a girlfriend.
Cloud's craziness was odd but somehow very, very interesting. Especially with the heartless. And the darkness. Very cool.
A few of Yuffie's comments were a little digressive/unnecessary...but mostly I liked them. Added character .
Heartless don't kill. I'd hazard to say that they're incapable of killing. I think it's a Disney thing, like Cid's little bit of straw that he chews instead of smoking and Leon saying something like "well, /geez/ Sora" in Chain of Memories. But you're take on them is creepy-cool, and very effective for the direction you seem to be taking this story in. I look forward to the next chapter.
| Demeter1 chapter 1 . 4/22/2005
My body just about convulsed in anticipation. This sounds *wonderful*. The premise, being told from Yuffie's point of view, and yet consuming both stories. I just about wanted to cry.
Once again, I love your control of your prose. It just *fit* with Yuffie and the way she told the story and dear Slytherin, I cannot wait until Vincent enters the fic. *sparkles*
| Tobu Ishi chapter 1 . 4/22/2005
You know what? The really great thing about your writing, for me (besides all the stuff you get complimented on to high heaven as usual, since by now metaphors that sparkle like crown jewels and your wonderful eternal vein of humor that runs through all the angst are par for the course by now) is that each one of your heroines is different. Despite all being young and mouthy and scrappy and female, they have their own touches (Eiko is clever and mechanical-minded and practical and more spiritual than she lets on, and Rikku is silly and very caring and sentimental and a bit vain, and this Yuffie of yours is deliciously insulting and kind of lonely and very teenaged and just a little obscene) and you make us love them all.
| Black Jester chapter 1 . 4/22/2005
I don't kow how you do it. I honestly don't. There's something about your writing - the rambling, run-on sentences and the perfect metaphors and the wonderful, beautiful wording - that makes me want to read it over and over and over and then go and write my own.
Your 'Yuffie-voice' is wonderful, perfectly spot-on and the descriptions of all the things that happen to her and all the things she sees are wonderful as well.
The Tifa-Barret-Marlene constellation is so cute, for lack of a better word, and the whole scene of eating dinner (friend chicken has never sounded so good) together like that made me all warm and cosy.
But of course, in true Guardian-style, you had to bring in the Heartless and Cloud's madness.
This is - in fact - more or less the way I imagined it happening. Perhaps I didn't expect Barret, nor Marlene, but this is perfect. If you ever write a book, I'll buy it. Hell, maybe I'll just print these out and keep 'em in a folder. But then I'll only read them til' they fall apart.
If this story could be anything (and the same goes for all your other stories, but the KH ones in particular) then it would be a painting. It would be painted in cheerfully yellow and red and orange, as well as black and blue and green, and ye gods, I think I'll go look for my paintbrushes right now.
All I can say is that the writing of this fic (and the other KH, since they sort of hang together) is as close to perfect as I'm ever going to get.
Thanks for writing it.
| V.V.R chapter 1 . 4/22/2005
Holy crap. I didn't think I'd ever come across a fic writer good enough to make the Heartless seem bad-ass. I don't think I could come up with a better compliment.