Reviews for The Return of the Dark Prince
bella.beau.14 chapter 12 . 12/2/2014
Update soon please what's going to happen next?
geoff chapter 1 . 9/19/2014
You had me but as soon as you brought up the Jedi you lost me
TheEagerScribbler chapter 2 . 1/29/2011
"A Happy ending it is."

"Don't be such a sissy Lucius!" Funny. Even though you used the wrong words for things occasionally. For instance, I think you meant rewarded instead of awarded.
IchigoRenji chapter 12 . 10/1/2009
Love it _ keep up the great work _
LillyRose95 chapter 12 . 2/15/2009
i think that this is a gr8 story and hope its updated soon.
Bluekelp chapter 3 . 6/3/2008
Preposterous and unbelievable, but a potentially entertaining, suspenseful thriller. Needs a Beta, and needs to be fleshed out more, but a good, readable draft with good spelling and grammar (which is often more important than any writing device in a story.)
Lady Siren Jade Riddle chapter 3 . 12/30/2006
Well... I DID have a whole lot of advice for you, but then I hit the wrong button and lost it all...

Basically, It all boiled down to this...

This isn't very believable and it's completely out of charactor. I suggest you add more details, take a look at some other well known and well written fics in this genre, and, above all, reread your story and make sure it sounds right. As it is, (I don't mean to flame)it kind of sucks...

Please, take a good look at your charators and their actions, as well as their REACTIONS... Does it sound right to you? Does it match their personlity? Is it how you really WANT it to be? Try and get a decent BETA and someone who has plenty experience with their own fics or plenty of experiance reading fics. They'll be able to help you and, more than likly, will give you wonderful advice.

Now, honestly, please, get rid of the whole STAR WARS crud. It just doesn't work with this story... I've read a couple of xovers that were really good, but I can't say that this is. If you can honestly make it work, do so, but if not, you should leave it alone...

Thanks for listening... I hope I helped a bit...

Alwasy keep a sharp quill and a full pot of ink nearby; you never know when inspiration will strike!

Nixxie
Merrymow chapter 12 . 10/4/2006
I was wondering when you're going to update ' The Return of the Dark Prince'
SOME1 SOME WHERE chapter 11 . 6/21/2006
WRITE MORE WRITE MORE WRITE MORE THIS IS BLOODY GOOD
Suiadan chapter 11 . 3/13/2006
looks great please update soon
Sarah Riddle Potter chapter 11 . 2/9/2006
Wow! Awesome story. Very interesting. I just love it. Can't wait to find out what happens next.
darthdrew1704 chapter 11 . 1/17/2006
dude update soon cant wait to read more.

Darth
justanotherfan756 chapter 11 . 1/16/2006
Great story! Somewhat... the raping part...
Draco.M-Hermoine.G chapter 11 . 12/6/2005
i say dun think abt it its onli constructive critiscm dun worry the story is told the way the author wants it rite? dun let him burst that bubble the story still has your essence and the suspense is immense keep it up ur on my favourite authors list )
Smittened By Marauders chapter 11 . 12/5/2005
-tries to kill dumbledore and R-Weasley!- DIE YOU BITCHEZ! bwahahahaha!

harry FOREVER!

Leave Gin-GIn! LIVE! You CAN make it!

Yes, nice for explaining that Harry's immortal -smile good save...

i was expecting that but still... the SUSPENSE! lol

laterz
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