Ah- this one was quite as interesting as the previous, yes? I found your conversation between Erik and Mme. Giry very appropriate; it's interesting to hear Mame Giry 'mouth off' to Erik about his self-pity and the such, but very appropriate.

You've got me more curious on what Erik's going to do with his new found 'fortune' of sorts. Please continue, soon!

Good story so far. Can't wait to see where it's going.

I again must compliment you on your outstanding talent, a radiant piece. I would also like to point out that you do a wonderful job describing, and dialoging Madame Giry. Not many writers on the website have captured her the way you have. I am extremly impressed.

O! A chapter two? How delightful! (You can tell, obviously, that most other authors I'm following update their stuff every millenia. LOL. Bleh.)

I was pleased to see this updated, in any case. ;)

So! A story that ACTUALLY adds the voice of reason and culpability

to Erik's actions. That's fairly new. How many ALW stories have I read that have the Opera go up in flames and no one seeming to mind that countless lives were ruined? It usually get's lost somewhere in the "How on earth could Christine LEAVE him?" plotline. *rolles eyes*

Bravo for breaking it down and adding a heaping dose of reality to the situation.

This line was particularly affecting: “Do not think me kind, Monsieur. You have scorned my kindness and scattered it to the wind, I have none left... You have made me a murderer. I cannot forgive you. I can scarce live with myself. But if you should live to find your honour... Well. Perhaps you may redeem us both.”

Couldn't have been more poignant than that! Madame Giry's proverbial slap to Erik's face seemed highly and entertainingly appropriate.

I'm glad Christine isn't living with Raoul at this point, either. I see that happen a lot as well, and it doesn't really strike me as wholly believable. (Especially before they're married.) These may just seem like subtle and/or uninteresting little nuances, but they really make all the difference. Good job!

Look forward to the next chapter! (And is it just me, or do those almond rolls sound kind of tasty?) ;)

I *like* this story! The characters and situations are so far shaping up to be quite believeable - much more realistic than some of the phanfic I've read. I like how Madame Giry wasn't all 'oh, poor Erik - we should forgive him anything because of his awful childhood.' And how Christine was turned down for a singing part at another theater because of events during "Don Juan."

Great visualization of Erik's "living" conditions amongst the discarded, rain soaked trash behind the ruins of the Opera house.

The only real fault I found with the story was the use of "asphalt" as pavement for the roads. Seems too contemporary. Cobblestones perhaps?

Keep up the great work! I look forward to your next posting. :)

Barb

this is off to a great start! you have such a way with descriptions, i can almost feel erik's pain. :) keep it up! *adds to favorites*

Can I just say that I truly love your style of writing, it's beautiful, the descriptions are wonderful, and there are so many great lines here that I can't even begin to name them all, but, for example: "He held her, this girl he had loved since they were children, this woman he did not know at all, and for a while he could believe that he had managed to save her after all."

And this: "Her arms had been fragile porcelain in his grip, and he had thought this made her weak but it was the other way around, oh Christine..."

I really hope you'll update soon :-)

Great beginning- it ends in just the right place to make us want more. I like your style, and the mixture of dialogue and description seems just right . I already feel really sorry for Raoul! Keep writing please :)

Oh I love your style! It's a pleasure to read.

Please go on!

Great beginning! I am now completely intrigued!

I must admit that I'm not a huge fan of ALW movie fics, largely because the characterizations are so far off from the original novel and the writing itself is usually less than enthralling. (Plots, it seems, are often hard to come by.)

But I found your descriptions perfectly charming, and the writing in general is wholly captivating. I appreciate the fact that you've given the characters some integrity, meaning that Raoul isn't raping anyone and Christine isn't horrendously stupid. I realize that this is only the beginning, but it has the potential to really go somewhere. I'll be sure to follow!

Who knows? You may end up selling me on ALW movie fiction after all! ;)

*clicks and adds to favorites*

This was an extremly impressive start. Unlike some of the stories I have read, your story remains true to the characters. Captured personalities. Your writing is fluid, wonderful syntax, and very descriptive. I applaud your work and look foreward to a recent update, yet I do know that great writing takes time.

There isn't much I can tell you here that I haven't already said to you. You know I love it, you know you're fabulous...Blah blah.

Oh, that's a perfect cliff hanger! Your passages are beautifully layed out, and the way you set the scenery for the story is wonderful. Mon Dieu, please update soon- I'm wondering!