um, I how it starts off as; however wouldn't Harry's protection be by blood and seeing as the woman in question is infact his grandmother, she is his blood. Plus ther is the fact she loves him too. Oh what of padfoot?

I've got a good reason: Elixir of Life. It's possible the Stone could rejuvenate Harry's grandmother, and possibly even cure Cho's brother. If that doesn't get Harry interested, I don't know what will.

Great job so far...I really like how you've made Harry out. True, it's a bit different from canon, but this is what I think Dumbledore had in mind for Harry to avoid when he made the comment about wanting Harry to grow up away from the legend.

Wow, Just...wow. There are no words to which I can express to what I feel to be an utter atrocity.

Firstly, you have a feminine Harry raised by women. That absolutely screams SLASH. You should put a waring in the summery.

Second, we have spoiled/pampered/arrogant/immature/lazy Harry Potter. That is just a recipe for disaster. Of course, he'll be Slytherin, so Severus will not give him the serious beatdown this kid needs.

And third, we have the afore mentioned Harry Potter whom is obviously powerful enough to overpower the strongest wizard currently alive while he himself is untrained.

Yeah, I believe there's a word for this type of thing. Fail.

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There, after the flamer comes some constructive thinking.

Firstly, the boy is eleven, one might show glimpses of powers to come, but not on this scale.

Second, the kid needs some balls. Be a little more masculine.

Third, he is supposedly cultered or aristocratic. They fight with cunning, not threats and childish spell throwing.

Forth, you have good grammer and such, a few letters missing, but nothing big.

Fifth, slash or no slash?

Sixth, give this kid a beatdown. Beat the crap outta him, he needs to realize he's not on top yet, not for a long while.

I suppose at this point nit-picking doesn't matter, but I can't resist the urge to point out that at "The woman stormed out of the bank and gave Draco and me the most frightful glare as she passed"

it would be more in line with Narcissa's noble upbringing if she said "Draco and I".

Harry Fleur, if you please.

Oh, and make sure Harry's sword isn't too ridiculously big, like Zangetsu big. That would ruin the image.

I'd prefer Harryfleur, if you please

Please continue this!

I'm not sure what I dislike more. A weak, pathetic, basically a pussyHarry or a spoiled one, but I know I don't like this one too much right now. I mean hes too much like what I'd expect Draco Malfoy to be, and that really disgusts me.

That said this is well written, and flows well so far. Thats not really a surprise though, since since I've read NTS and PoD (which I like more than this fic so far).

WHAT IS WITH HARRYS HAIR. PLAESE CUT IT. I JUST CANT IMAGINE HIM WITH REALLY LONG HAIR. WHERE IS IS MESSY MOP.

Other then that I love it. Its great.

dude yu ever goin to update this ?

Leave out the goofy grin at the end and I'll be happy.

And... 'his forehead had borne a rather unnatural

mark, an emerald green scar shaped like a lightning bolt'

And emerald green scar? Really? Or is that a typo?

Nice story, by the way- infinitely better than mine, anyway.

I am wondering, is this the response to a harry that is spoiled challenge?

I remember seeing smething like this, were harry was supposed to be thinking like this, he is too good for rules and stuff?

oh well,

great story so far though, cant wait for more.

Keny

you one of the most amazing authors ever.

i wish you'ld continue.. :(

It has been over a year since you updated either of your Harry Potter stories. It's not fair to keep them posted if you don't plan to finish them. So PLEASE update soon, alright? Both your stories are absolutely brilliant!