|Reviews for Don't|
| Donald chapter 14 . 12/30/2012
Ya know Riku/Sora happy ending
| Donald chapter 14 . 12/30/2012
Why the hell didn't you finish it?
| Donald chapter 2 . 12/29/2012
Not Kairi supporter, I'm a Kingdom Hearts fan and this is how the real world is one of my exes is just like that to everybody and she's coming back. UGH! It will be hell for everybody... This is gonna hurt! Quite good.
| Rena Sakurai chapter 14 . 3/14/2011
O.O GAH! YOU NEED TO CONTINUE THIS STORY! Though I'm not sure if you will since the last update was in 2006. T.T It's a good story too. Oh well, I'll wait and see what happens.
| Rena Sakurai chapter 7 . 3/14/2011
This is one of the most darkest and twisted stories I have ever read on here...AND I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT! Oh my god. More people need to write like this. And also, love the Kairi bashing. It needed to be done. Great story!
| anon. y. mous chapter 14 . 3/14/2008
This isn't a flame, before I get dipped in kerosene. :
Yeah, Sora is painfully out of character here. The main parts of his personality ARE that he's incredibly bubbly and enthusiastic. He's :D brought to life. This isn't Sora, he's the anti-Sora. s: And, yeah, he -does- like Kairi in one way or another. I don't think he's going around thinking up plans to kill her.
Also, what's the deal with making her a complete whore and pointlessly bashing her? I'm not a huge Kairi fan or anything, but I could tell from the game that she's...well, she's not what you've turned her into. Yeah, that whole "Princess of Heart" wasn't just a title. :
Oh, the ;; and / as thought marks? No. It's "'s or italics. They make the story really difficult to read.
This would probably be a lot better as original fiction, to be honest, considering "KH didn't happen". If it didn't happen, then these characters aren't from KH, are they?
There's also a lot of grammatical errors. Get yourself a good beta, it'll improve loads. :)
| Hakudoushi kawaii ne chapter 1 . 10/29/2007
Reading this.. Or should I even say reading? I read about 20 sentences after that I gave up.
Having Sora’s thought’s between those ;; two marks, is stupid. When having thought’s you use these ones ''.
It’s not “cool” you go your own way, it’s just confusing.
And wtf? Why do you have your own thought’s in the middle of the text? It’s annoying and frankly I don’t care what you think about the characters or whatever. Leave your thoughts to be at the end or beginning, where I can choose whether I want to read you babbling on about something I don‘t care about.
U should have more structure in the text. Divide it better. DO dare using she enter key and jump down a line to start the next sentence. It’s confusing when you have it all in a mass of clutter.
Why is Sora a bitch? Have you ever played the game? Do you know that you’ve made Sora so OOC it’s almost like an Au-Sora. (the rest Iunno about, but they‘re probably just as Ooc as Sora. Wouldn‘t surprise me)
Bleh! Sorry, I did not like ur story :/
| Raina chapter 1 . 5/5/2007
This fic is terrible.
;'s and /'s do NOT make acceptable end punctuation. You're not coming off as post-modernist, so please stop.
Also, whether you want to admit it or not- Sora likes Kairi, even if just as a friend. He's horribly OOC. You've erased his optimism and spunk to make him a moody, whiny brat. He has respect for everyone, and you stripped that.
Also, Kairi's a Princess of Heart. Do you have an earthly CLUE of what this means, or did you completely ignore the first game dialogue whenever Riku came on the screen? Because believe it or not, Riku did a lot more than look pretty for you.
Being a Princess of Heart means you have NO DARKNESS IN YOUR HEART. So, the Kairi bash and rape? Insta-fail. Thanks for tearing up the trinity so you can have your stupid 'OTP'. Obviously, you don't know how to make it happen within the actual personalities that we've come to know and love.
No, this isn't a nice review. But this isn't a nice story, and I'm not a blind yaoi lover. I care about the story. Not the buttsex. So, yay. Riku and Sora are together. Big whoop. I'm glad you had fun.
| lil JJ chapter 14 . 10/23/2006
Pleez make Ch.15
| pride1289 chapter 14 . 10/14/2006
wow...this chap waz missing a songz...i never noticed though...
| pride1289 chapter 12 . 10/14/2006
i haf a bad feeling if u do kill him he will die in 1 uv da most dramatic wayz possible...well anywayz i still luv da story!
| pride1289 chapter 10 . 10/14/2006
this iz litterally the sadest story i have ever read...
| pride1289 chapter 5 . 10/13/2006
omfg! kairiz fuckin scary in dis!0.0
| pride1289 chapter 3 . 10/13/2006
gah! kairi scarez me more than evur now!
| pride1289 chapter 2 . 10/13/2006
ohoh oh oh oh! can i haf rinzu! ill gif u 5 boxez uv giant pocky! *waves giant boxez uv pocky at u* nd onfg! kairi sprung a leak! that was so funny!