nice so far but you use with instead of when in a couple of places."himself with fourteen"That was malicious and vicious, not treats of Gryffindor" think acts of gryffindor better. Spotted a couple of others as well but does not make the story any less enjoyable.

wow i really like the story a lot and i think i will check out the other storys that you have written well i will talk er... read ya later hope you are still haveing fun writing or doing whatever it is that you are doin byb

I have to say that as much as I love dark Harry stories I was a little wary about a HP/BL pairing but your story was VERY good. I read fan-fics at work to pass the time but with yours I had to come home and get right back on and finish it. I loved it!

I've loved this story since the first time I read it a few years ago! It's easily one of my absolute favorites!

Great story. I liked it very much.

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It says 'That is two words that dont go together' wen it should be ' THOSE are two words that dont go together

potty!

One if the best story I have ever read so funny well done

I LOVE IT

Great story!

You've done fairly well but your character growth tends to be sudden and erratic. Also you do not show the damage people suffer under extreme trauma. Bellatrix just didn't seem portrayed right in the beginning of the fiction, mostly because she was too sane. However these are subjects even professional writers often have great difficulty with. Otherwise your work is excellent and I hope your writing is able to grow in these directions.

Thanks for a fun read! You did an excellent job of creating a believable relationship between Harry and Bella, with enough fluff to satisfy those who like it while not causing crusty curmudgeons like me to gag :) A really fun read. Not sure if you're still actively writing, but I've noticed your comments about translation, and wanted to offer a suggestion.

I wanted to read some of the stories written in German only, and since my German is limited to a few words not used in polite company and the little I recall from one year studying when I was 8 years old, I take chapters of those stories and paste them into Google Translate. While not perfect, you can certainly get a readable story that way, even if it's awkward in places. So my suggestion would be that if you wanted to post in English, run the stories through the translator and then send them to an English beta for clean-up. In case you're curious, here's the same review translated that way:

Danke für einen Spaß zu lesen! Sie haben eine ausgezeichnete Arbeit zu schaffen, eine glaubhafte Beziehung zwischen Harry und Bella, mit genügend Flaum zu denen, die es während nicht verkrusteten Knicker verursacht, wie ich zu knebeln erfüllen:) Ein wirklich Spaß zu lesen. Nicht sicher, ob Sie immer noch aktiv schreiben, aber ich habe Ihre Bemerkungen über die Übersetzung bemerkt, und wollte eine Anregung bieten.

Ich wollte einige der Geschichten auf Deutsch geschrieben nur lesen, und da mein Deutsch noch ein paar Worte nicht in guter Gesellschaft verwendet begrenzt ist und das kleine Ich erinnere mich von einem Jahr studieren, wenn ich 8 Jahre alt war, ich nehme Kapitel dieser Geschichten und fügen Sie sie in Google Translate. Zwar nicht perfekt, können Sie sicher erhalten eine lesbare Geschichte, die Art und Weise, auch wenn es stellenweise peinlich. Also mein Vorschlag wäre, dass, wenn Sie wollte auf Englisch zu posten, führen Sie die Geschichten über den Übersetzer und schicken sie dann an einen englischen Beta für clean-up. Falls Sie neugierig sind, hier ist die gleiche Überprüfung übersetzt so:

So, I have no idea how well it does, or if you are at all interested, but thought I would offer the suggestion.

I have been enjoying your writing, so thanks!

Great story! Loved it! :D :)

An inteligent, poweful and Dark Harry is briliant fantastic chapter.

Very enjoyable read, loved what happened to the old man and how Harry is fighting this type of story is so good yet so rare.