|Reviews for I'm here for you|
| Winter.Waltz chapter 2 . 6/24
James... Vladnoska? The name sounds... oddly Russian, no? I suppose the guy has some sort of connection to Kai, hm? Or maybe I'm thinking too much, ha ha. But oh well.
Whilst the story seems fairly interesting and contains much potential, I suggest you tidy up your writing a bit? And fix up your punctuation mark skills.
Also, I noticed that many of the characters were rather out-of-character- like when Rei hugged Kai (I suppose he *can* hug Kai if the blunette spends a truck-load of his money on things Rei likes, ha ha). I mean, although his response to Kai's charity is rather logical, I don't think he would... throw himself upon Kai, just like that? /shot. It's just... Rei knows how reserved Kai is, right? And Rei, himself, is a bit wary, no?
Other examples of out-of-character-ness in here would include when Rei slipped and went, "Owwwwiiiieee". Clearly, his reaction seemed a bit... childish? A simple "ouch" would have sufficed, no?
And also when Tyson complained about Max's act of simpering over... uh... *hot* guys *coughs*, Kai shared the story of his own misery with the World Champion- very unlike him to open up like that, especially to Tyson, don't you think? I feel as though in actuality, Kai would have simply shrugged off Tyson's rant and kept to himself.
And does Max actually call guys, um, *hot*? I actually think he'd be one to call them *cute*, ha ha.
And when Max asked Rei to spill about his collision with James at the mall, he seemed... very much like a gossip-girl, in my opinion. I mean, sure, he's growing, but what about his... um, innocent curiosity? (How do I actually word this?) And Rei fashion of responding to the blond's interrogation confused me as well. How did he catch so much of James features in such a short amount of time?
I think I'll just stop now, ha ha. I have a horrid habit of nit-picking. A LOT. So my opinions may seem a bit too much or too trival, which I can understand. I mean, you *are* the author of this piece of fiction, so do whatever you please! (I don't mean to be sarcastic!) This story has a lot of potential, and I believe with some minor tinkering, it can be improved even more.
Kai x Rei forever!
| yaoiluver889 chapter 2 . 11/8/2011
| BloodRedViolet chapter 2 . 7/3/2007
this is a good story please keep it up and you not a bad writer you just nedd a bit more practice
| Lyrancon chapter 2 . 1/25/2007
OMYGAWD! XD *laughs* never believed that kai could sulk like that...aw but I do pity him...HOW DOES THAT DUDE DARE TO ASK REI OUT! ALL FANS UNITE AND KILL HIM! sorry I kinda freaked out *nervous laughter* I like ur story...it contains a lot of humour
I hope you post again soon and btw...when your computer freezes...use the CtrlAltDelete...or just kick it once or twice,...it always helpsXD at least...it helps when with my compu...
see yah around
| hieinkurama chapter 2 . 12/16/2006
Please you have to update soon this is way to good for you to stop there and what is with this new guy? I thought that this was a Kai and Rei story.
| Sam chapter 2 . 10/12/2006
why do I expect that this "Jason" is gonna be in their class...
| Elin chapter 2 . 10/8/2006
squel. A-M-A-Z-I-N-G, poor Kai though. update soon!
| blankdotblankdotblank chapter 2 . 7/26/2006
PLEASE CONTINUE THIS SOON! I CANT WAIT TILL THE NEXT CHAPTER IM PRACTICALLY BITTING MY FINGERS OFF TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS SO UPDATE SOON!
| Jealydatylsmith chapter 2 . 6/24/2006
oh my god
you are going to finish this
i'm make a deal with you
every time you up a chapter up i'll give a cookie that way i can chapters and i wont get fat eating all theses cookies by my self
| The Laughing Mann chapter 2 . 6/17/2006
That's a bit of reverse pyschology there, you simply say your a bad writer to get people to review, but whatever works. This is a good fic but please don't take 5-6 month to update!
| kitti corpse chapter 2 . 6/3/2006
please write more, i want to know what happens next
| The Pheonix of Black Flames chapter 2 . 4/2/2006
HOT TOPIC AND YAOI RULES ALL!
| Evil Kitty-Cat chapter 2 . 1/8/2006
I bet they do get worse!
I also bet that "James" goes to the same school they are going to enroll in!
I can't wait until you update!
Please do it soon!
| pemphetru chapter 2 . 12/23/2005
QQ poor kai... update! i like this! if you ever need a moral-booster, ask! XD this is god!
| Somebodyyyy chapter 2 . 11/29/2005
That was an awesome story.
Update soon please...?