Never have I seen such a beautiful story in my lifetime. The syntax, interaction and dialogue between the characters, and cards you decided to have Ryou place in relation to the story are all wonderful. I believe that nothing will be able to make this start better than it already is.

i love this!

Interesting.

Yeah If Bakura Was about to kiss me I with out I don't in my mind would have let him.

Anyway's in the Japnes version i swear there was something between them. Like Beauty and the beast. Angel and demon. Light and dark. Overall Tendershipping for real. Luv it

Overall it was a good intreating story.

I ship light and dark relationships.

PuzzleShipping

BronzShipping

Tendershipping

Dbz-Fan-Girl. Is out. Sorry if it's not written the best I'm tired and all. Overall all really good.

This is very good! The imagery and liquid writing are magnificent. it is very easy to read and has deep ideas that make sense. Good job

I don't think I've ever read anything that changed my view and understanding of characters until this fic

Applaud, this was greatly done , and thank you for those

This is so phenomenal. It's so well-written and insightful. I love it.

You did a good job balancing out the characters and exploring their yin/yang qualities. I also like how you handled the relationship, not abusive, but not sappy and retarded. My favorite scene is when Yami Bakura tries to build his own card house and breaks down after failing. I also enjoyed the part where he sings. Thanks for the good story.

This was gorgeous and captured the characters so well; I especially loved your explanation at the end for the cards you chose. I personally love their deck, mainly because it is about control rather than power. (I'm not a duelist anymore, but I couldn't find anything wrong with your description regardless.)

Thank you for writing this!

This was a lovely read. You didn't go out of character with either of them, and you brought out Bakura's frustration really well. The scene where he tried to make one himself was perfect. Very sad, but very good. The dreams fit in to the rest of the story. When Bakura called for Ryou by yadunoshi, the old fat landlords responding was funny without seeming out of place. And it forced him to call Ryou by his name, which is important. He calls Ryou by the title 'landlord' so often that him saying 'Ryou' is more noticeable. And it seems more intimate!

Thank you for posting this up, I really enjoyed reading it!

-BS

Oh, what is this I don't even.

I... I can't read this without feeling so inadequate and just... awful about my own writing! This is so depressing, and yet I wouldn't trade this experience for anything else in the world. You have no idea how long I've been going through horrible fanfics in this fandom. To have stumbled upon this gem is just... absolutely marvelous! A treasure!

There's such a delicate and firm tone that you've taken to match the beautiful dynamic you explore between Bakura and Ryou. I don't know if that was intentional or not, but it really is beautiful. And, for the first time in a long, long while, the lyrics to a song were weaved into the story almost seamlessly; it felt like they belonged there. I feel like it worked better as I personally didn't know or recognize the song at all (I immediately went to find it upon finishing it) because there was no melody that distracted from thenatural rhythm and flow of the story; I'm not sure how it worked out with other readers who were familiar, but I'm sure the effect only emphasized the beauty of this story.

The moment you began identifying the cards Ryou drew was the moment I began to really love this piece; I had a feeling that it was put together with a specific meaning in mind and that's what became so appealing to me. I immediately thought of T. S. Eliot's use of Tarot cards in "The Waste Land," which fits quite well here, as the occult was used symbolically to express a certain thought, a certain... motif that very quickly revealed itself and dominated the story throughout.

And oh, the dreams! When you presented their dreams, they too were fitted into the story without disturbing the flow, and their simplicity was what helped to emphasize one another's personalities and differences in character. Some writers tend to go a little over the top with their dream sequences, but here you've executed them perfectly! There's not even a single sentence that I would take out to help alleviate unnecessary pressure onto the flow of the story.

Their exchanges, though brief, moved at just the right pace. The simple sentences helped to move the story along and also assisted in creating a sort of... tension? that kept things in light suspense.

I was so pleased with how enticing it was, and with how simple you kept everything. Augh. So jealous, so incredibly jealous ;_;

- A. E. Stover

I don't normally like boyxboy romance, but this wasn't the stereotypical version that has become all too common. This was very psychological and symbolic, and both Ryo and Bakura stayed in character the entire time. Truly a well-written piece.

I love this so, so much. The themes are astounding - and, what's more, internally consistent, which is always good. Bittersweet, and melancholy, and adorable in a subdued sort of fashion. The dialogue is brilliant: insightful and symmetrical, but in a natural way, rather than anything obvious or stilted. The last few hundred words or so were pretty much perfect, with all the motifs combining and culminating in something both original and poignant. Definitely one of my favourite fics.

and it's ironic that this is a japanese show, where the country places some emphasise on the balance of things in everything they do. great oneshot - care to write some more with this theme?

brittney

Woooow...this is just...amazing. AMAZING!

"Enterprises?" Now you've got me curious, how many authors does this fic have? Was it written RP style? This was really good, I enjoyed it a lot. The dual introspective came out really fabulously here. Good job.