|Reviews for The Last Toa|
| Kurai Tasogare chapter 1 . 11/5/2005
could be worse...could be a lot better. Your character intros were al little choppy, and if I were you I'd make sure that in each paragraph concerning a character you add character interactions, such as, ' Tania and Kira were good friends' or something like that. Maybe you did. I kinda skim read this kind of 3 out of 5 star stuff.
Again, could be worse, could be better. I'll be on the lookout for chapter two so that I can check to see if you improved, and to see what happens to our yound heroine.
OH..The 'hundreds of Bios..' thing in your summary? A bio is about a foot, dude. Pay attention in your Bionicle vacabulary classes. I think the term that youo are looking for is, 'kio' meaning about a half of a mile, and 50 miles can be seen from Mata Nui unless your island is past the Great Barrier thing.
| Slythergrl2004 chapter 1 . 7/16/2005
:-D Good Job!
| R-4 gamma chapter 1 . 6/23/2005
cmon, mon! pleease update UPDATE PU-LEASE! MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPEND! okay i am done now.
| TigerTamer7 chapter 1 . 6/21/2005
Me: Hey! My real penname's Tahalii, but I'm having computer trouble and can't log-in. Anyway...
Kekoru: Just review already!
Me: Alright, geez! Keep your mask on! Man, and people think Breoal's the cranky one...
Kekoru: I heard that-
Me: ON WITH THE REVIEW! Let me make a list of what I think you should do concerning this story:
4)Eat a jelly dounut, then write more...
5)Re-read #'s 1-3...
6)Re-read #'s 1-3 AND #5...
7)I think you get the point...
| nightbug08 chapter 1 . 6/3/2005
small rahi? like a chipmunk? -sees horde of evil chipmunks staring at her- um chipmunks aren't relly that dangerous, right? AH -chipmunks attack she is soon buried under a giant pile of evil chipmunks-
| ToaMaster chapter 1 . 5/11/2005
HOW COULD YOU MAKE THEM DIE AND LEAVE KIRA ALONE?
Anyway, good fanfic. I'm on the verge of make the next chapter in The Guardian. Update soon.
| Sherryann Kitsune chapter 1 . 5/10/2005
Oh, how so sad...*sobs*
This story had a good start! I want to know what happens next! Update soon please!