Reviews for The Last Toa
Kurai Tasogare chapter 1 . 11/5/2005
could be worse...could be a lot better. Your character intros were al little choppy, and if I were you I'd make sure that in each paragraph concerning a character you add character interactions, such as, ' Tania and Kira were good friends' or something like that. Maybe you did. I kinda skim read this kind of 3 out of 5 star stuff.

Again, could be worse, could be better. I'll be on the lookout for chapter two so that I can check to see if you improved, and to see what happens to our yound heroine.

OH..The 'hundreds of Bios..' thing in your summary? A bio is about a foot, dude. Pay attention in your Bionicle vacabulary classes. I think the term that youo are looking for is, 'kio' meaning about a half of a mile, and 50 miles can be seen from Mata Nui unless your island is past the Great Barrier thing.
Slythergrl2004 chapter 1 . 7/16/2005
:-D Good Job!
R-4 gamma chapter 1 . 6/23/2005
cmon, mon! pleease update UPDATE PU-LEASE! MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPEND! okay i am done now.
TigerTamer7 chapter 1 . 6/21/2005
Me: Hey! My real penname's Tahalii, but I'm having computer trouble and can't log-in. Anyway...

Kekoru: Just review already!

Me: Alright, geez! Keep your mask on! Man, and people think Breoal's the cranky one...

Kekoru: I heard that-

Me: ON WITH THE REVIEW! Let me make a list of what I think you should do concerning this story:

1)Write more...

2)Write more...

3)Write more...

4)Eat a jelly dounut, then write more...

5)Re-read #'s 1-3...

6)Re-read #'s 1-3 AND #5...

7)I think you get the point...
nightbug08 chapter 1 . 6/3/2005
small rahi? like a chipmunk? -sees horde of evil chipmunks staring at her- um chipmunks aren't relly that dangerous, right? AH -chipmunks attack she is soon buried under a giant pile of evil chipmunks-
ToaMaster chapter 1 . 5/11/2005
HOW COULD YOU MAKE THEM DIE AND LEAVE KIRA ALONE?

Anyway, good fanfic. I'm on the verge of make the next chapter in The Guardian. Update soon.

Yours Truly,

ToaMaster
Sherryann Kitsune chapter 1 . 5/10/2005
Oh, how so sad...*sobs*

This story had a good start! I want to know what happens next! Update soon please!