Reviews for The FBI Agent, An ME and a Boy Scout
Colbykid chapter 11 . 4/30/2006
i hope there is more to this
Havoc chapter 2 . 12/17/2005
The premise here is quite good- Woody, Jordan, and Hailey all together is great concept. As you said you were new to this, can I add some helpful advice? First, spell-checking is a good idea; I can see places that show me you haven't. In addition, be careful with spacing on dialogue. Except in rare occasions, each speaker's words should be in a seperate paragraph from the speaker before. Even without names, the spaces allow the reader to follow who's saying what. In addition, I've never met an American yet who spoke without using contractions, but you're insisting on "I am" and the like, with makes this read a bit more stilted than I think you intended. Also, with some of the dialogue between Jordan and Hailey, you may want to pause and ask yourself if a character as stoic as Hailey would say some of these things, esp. in a place he knew to be some easy to observe (and record, for that matter). Some of those lines, I would be amazed to hear outside the bedroom, even if my husband said them. If he said them in a place connected with my profession, I would be extraodrdinarily pissed. Again, I think you have a great premise here, and I'm curious to see where you go with this idea. I've never beta'd (proofread for somebody) before, but if you're interested, I could help you out. I'm an English teacher by trade.
BrOwnI'dGirl chapter 11 . 12/3/2005
o shes awake! good job! cant wait for more!
Vote14Caskett chapter 11 . 10/25/2005
aw! how sweet!
beccles chapter 11 . 10/25/2005
that was a greta chapter and this is a great story keep it coming. i can't wait to read more
Shimigirl chapter 11 . 10/25/2005
aw! that's soo cute. Great job write more soon!
KittyDoggyLover chapter 11 . 10/25/2005
Hi!

GREAT chapter!

Please keep up the GREAT work!

I can't wait to read more.

Good Bye!
KittyDoggyLover chapter 10 . 10/24/2005
Hi!

Wow, what an interesting and scary fanfiction!

I can't wait to read more.

Keep up the GREAT work!

Please update soon.

Good Bye!
Shimigirl chapter 10 . 10/24/2005
keep up the great work. Gob job. update soon please!
Vote14Caskett chapter 10 . 10/24/2005
please let jordan be ok!
bec chapter 10 . 10/23/2005
oh my god this is so good. please update soon. i love it
Shimigirl chapter 9 . 10/23/2005
This is great so far. I'm at the edge of my seat. Pleas update soon because I can't wait to read more!
Vote14Caskett chapter 9 . 10/22/2005
great chapter! poor jordan!
BrOwnI'dGirl chapter 8 . 10/5/2005
i reallt really really really really really like this story but its been forever since you updated it would make a lot of people really really really happy if u added more cuz this is a AMAZING STORY
beccles chapter 8 . 9/22/2005
this is a really good fanfic can you please add some more chapters to it i want to find out what happens to jordan in the end, and what end's up between jordan,woody and the fbi agent
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