Reviews for What She Can't Say
PhoenixLance chapter 49 . 7/4/2014
Wow. I finished it. I don't think I have any words left to describe how amazing this piece of fiction is.

Obviously there are so many subplots left unresolved: Bonnie and her path of redemption, Felix, the ongoing war of wills between Mr and Mrs Possible, Monique and her recovery, Shego, and most importantly, Kim and Ron and their own recovery and secrets.

Quite honestly, as it stands right now, I think that Shego could win, and she has the upper hand until Ron gives Kim the full disclosure on his Monkey Powers, this elder (who I'm now sure is Sensei), and his binding promise. Until that happens, there will be a wedge between those two that she can exploit.

But enough speculating on a possible future. The most important thing here is that this is a work of art, by and far the best-written story I've ever read on this site. You're an artist sir; your pen is your brush that you use to deftly paint your imagination onto the canvas that is this website. Your characters are real and compelling, their trials and tribulations emotional and impactful, and the plot you've woven kept me on the edge of my seat until the very end. If this was a play in the theater, I would be emptying my bank accounts just to shower you with roses, as I clap and cheer until my hands bleed and voice dies.

I hope that one day soon you'll post the continuation/conclusion of this story, but even if you don't, I am more than satisfied with reading this over and over again.

Clear Skies,
PhoenixLance chapter 22 . 7/3/2014
So I'm about halfway through this fic, and I decided to pause and give my comments so far.

In a word: wow. I'm left breathless by the amount of care and work put into this, at how everything seems so convoluted and yet so interwoven. It's like you've taken Game of Thrones and molded it, fit it perfectly into the Kim Possible universe. At the same time, you've carried us through a roller coaster of emotions, and I don't feel us slowing down.

At the center of all these different plots lies Team Possible, or more specifically Kim. Wow. I know authors are supposed to torture their characters, but I was half-expecting her to wind up in a nuthouse by now. You absolutely tore her character to shreds, physically, emotionally, and mentally. You laid out all her faults to bare-some invented like her promiscuity, others that were barely hinted at in the show-and forced her to confront them before putting her back together again. And yet there are still cracks in the mold. She's not back together, not by a long shot. She's one gust of wind away from tumbling back over the abyss. And that makes me terrified for her, and it makes me care for her.

As for Ron, it's as if the roles have reversed themselves. He's become Kim, while Kim has essentially devolved into Ron. There has to be more than just the fact he loves Kim that is giving Ron this strength. It all leads back to this mysterious promise that is ever-present in Team Possible's relationship. While the obvious signs at first pointed to the discussion between Mr. Possible and Ron prior to Junior Prom, I'm more and more thinking this all goes back to the school in Japan, Ron's training with Sensei, and his Mystical Monkey Powers. The way he said "elder" after he and Kim got back together doesn't make it sound like he's holding back for his father's sake, and I'm pretty sure he would've told Kim if it were her dad. Ron's gotta come clean about the mystical mumbo jumbo at some point, otherwise it might just bring the whole relationship down.

As for your other characters, Bonnie has evolved as a character too, to the point where I actually care about her. She went from as psychotic as Drakken, to broken like Kim. I really want her to put herself back together again. As for Drakken, he legitly terrifies me now, but at the same time he's sympathetic because of what happened to him in prison. Felix. Monique. Wade. Rufus. Mrs. Possible. You're putting them all to the test, and I can't wait to see how they emerge from their fires.

And in the background, this mysterious governmental organization. They're almost as terrifying as Drakken for the simple fact that they're so shrouded in shadow.

I can't stop reading, your story continues to beckon. But just from the little bit that I've read here, this is quickly turning into one of the best-written fics I've ever read.
scout360pyro chapter 14 . 2/4/2014
Oh what a dark place you have led us to... always giving us a hint of hope when we are about to turn away... and to think there is still so much more of this story to read... Heh... just like life sometimes is, right?
all forms of fluff chapter 25 . 11/20/2013
Sadly I will not be finishing this story. The two shorts in the same universe were wonderful, but there is just too much "Real World" drama in this story. Kim Possiable is saposed to be about cartoonish villians and over complcated plots. Now while you have such in this story there is entierly to much 'this could really happen' in this story. I am not saying its a bad thing in fact I applaud you efforts as you have dedacated a great deal of time to this story. I just dont want that kind of seneiro playing out in Kim Possable, at least at this time. Maybe in a few months after I get tiered of the cartoonish ways of the universe I shall come back, Its not likely though.

So I thank you for this story. It was facanating and verry well put together. You truly have a tallent in consiriscy thriller writings and I do hope you dont ever give that up. Once agian Thank You for the story.
S chapter 15 . 6/3/2013
This story had the perfect plot but the drama and the ooc is killing it. Almost everything the characters here does is unbelievable.
KageOkami-Kogo chapter 1 . 2/5/2011
So far its really cute but Ron is extremely out of character... He's lacking his, well, his Ronness... he sounds like a 40 year old victorian aged intellectual version of himself "Boo-ya, my good Sir." ...not very Ron-like at all.

I suggest watching the show over, take notes on how he acts, speaks, what he says, etc... and then touch this story up a bit! Otherwise, it's very nice.
Man of Faith chapter 49 . 11/25/2010 took almost 3 days and a couple of nights of almost no sleep (i will SO GET YOU FOR THAT!..hehe) to finish this great piece of drama. I was about to say there are a lot of loose ends, but I'm sure when you are ready, you'll tie them all back up. This is a great way to end it and I hope the sequel will come soon.
Man of Faith chapter 5 . 11/22/2010
okay i dont know who i should be more scared of here...bonnie or drakken
Man of Faith chapter 4 . 11/22/2010 Dr D seems like he's gone off the deep end. This just got more interesting.
Man of Faith chapter 3 . 11/22/2010
So Shego is going to escape soon and Bonnie..well she's just as conniving as ever. I'm curious though as to why Ron is angry and disgusted at himself? I actually applaud the guy for a lot of self control.
Man of Faith chapter 2 . 11/22/2010
huh...i actually like how you delve into the "evil" characters in this story and actually gave them a more humane look (although I hope we'll see more on shego's side). It really gives you a sense of the different motivations for their evil, esp Bonnie.
W. Stock chapter 46 . 8/25/2010
This is a thoroughly compelling chapter(story). I was thoroughly entertained from beginning to end, and I highly recommend it.
W. Stock chapter 45 . 8/25/2010
This is a thoroughly compelling chapter(story). I was thoroughly entertained from beginning to end, and I highly recommend it.
W. Stock chapter 44 . 8/25/2010
This is a thoroughly compelling chapter(story). I was thoroughly entertained from beginning to end, and I highly recommend it.
W. Stock chapter 43 . 8/25/2010
This is a thoroughly compelling chapter(story). I was thoroughly entertained from beginning to end, and I highly recommend it.
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