|Reviews for The Track of a Storm|
| dragonfox123 chapter 1 . 3/1/2017
Interesting idea and plot and chapter
| SeaSpree chapter 26 . 2/7/2017
This is an absolutely, amazing work of writing! The characterization was absolutely perfect, and your pacing was impeccable (I think I was dying during the first ten chapters - the tension!).
| YuunaFiction chapter 8 . 1/22/2017
Don't know what I think about this story. James seem to be awfully slow and dense in this story. And why exactly did he stay so long with those people? Not to mention Harry didn't even have a gravestone.. why didn't he contact anyone? He suspected dumbledore was alive so these is no excuse really. Why didn't he apparate from the house? He's an auror, not a first year of Hogwarts like he appears to be.
It's well written but it doesn't change the fact that I've rolled my eyes several times in just 8 chapters from the actions of James and his pity party. He's been dead, sure, but seem to be able to cope just fine if it wasn't for his emo-state and sub-par auror skills(apparently).
I'd also like to mention that for magical people.. they sure don't use all that much magic at all. I mean, James, really.. You don't normally need a wand to apparate and certainly not if you're a bloody Auror! I'm sorry, there is just no excuse.
Did I mention Remus is pathetic? No? Remus is pathetic.
| Blackpantherprince chapter 25 . 1/7/2017
Very sweet!:) So glad for Harry, he finally got his first real Christmas! :D However, I feel a bit sad for Draco and Narcissa, having lost Lucius, but the kitten was really adorable, the perfect Christmas gift... I am sure he(she?) will bring much joy to Draco, poor kid, he seems quite lonely, hope he and Harry will be good friends at Hogwarts... cute kid...
Seven year old Harry was just adorable! :) And I absoultely loved your portrayal of James, ( a true Gryffindor!) and the portrayal of all the marauders... and their relationship to each other and Harry... Remus and Harry's bonding in the prison was really touching, but my fav moment was probably when James first saw Harry in prison, followed by the reunion of Sirius and James... so much emotions...heartwarming story, amidst all the action and suspense, beautifully written...
| Blackpantherprince chapter 26 . 1/7/2017
Wow, that was an action packed and emotionally rollercoaster, very intense story, except for the last fluffy cjapters, when Everything was calmning down, very sweet... Intense, sweet and charmng story, love your sense of humor... your story was intense in every way, both action wise ( except at the end) and emotionally... very moving, your portray emotions very well...
However, there are some loose ends, whatever happended to Voldemort, after their escape, for example? How exactly is James and Voldy connected by blood, Dumbeldroe's explanation feels a bit vague... Did the Marauders and Snape ever reconcile, and how did the public react to James Potter's (and Voldy's) resurrection? I know that you said tthat you do not have the time for a sequel, but this story very much feels like the first installment in a series... still many gaps to fill... When Voldemort dies, will James also die? I sincerely hope not.
Alos, I feel that the last chapter with the Dursely confrontation would have fitted better as a one-short, as you originally planned according to your A/N, it feels a bit as an abrupt insertion here, and why did James never confront Dumbledore about leaving Harry with the Dursleys, or Sirius imprisonement without a trial? Dumbeldore would have know better then to leave Harry with, in Mcgonagall's Words "the worst kind of muggles", he is not without gulit.
However, overall, I find this story really good, I loved the action packed and emotional ride you gave us, the reunion of James and Harry was really touching, and I loved the happy, kind of fluffy ending, I really enjoyed it! :D I would just love to read that edited version you mentioned in your A/N and in your profile, but, unfortunately, I have not been able to find it...:( Would be great if you could help me with that. :)
Thanks for sharing and happy new year! :)
| Guest chapter 13 . 12/30/2016
A brilliant chapter! Loved it!
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/16/2016
Wait, will we see more of Flint? Is there a reason for him to defend Dumbledore even though he's a Slytherin compared to a troll in the books?
Also obviously this isn't going to change anything but I find the neighbors to be very confusing. Their accents are hard to understand and it's a large group all at once that's hard to differentiate. Are they muggles or magic? Why are they not more freaked out by a supposedly dead man showing up?
| Comrade'sRoza chapter 26 . 7/31/2016
Loved it! One of the best I have ever read.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 3 . 7/12/2016
Rather strange time zone where most stars are expected to have disappeared from the sky as early as 3 AM. Even during British Summer Time in June, no place in Britain is so far northeast of Greenwich that sunrise is at 3 AM. On April 30, 1987 in Cardiff, Wales (presumably not too far from Godric's Hollow) the sun rose at 5:48 AM and civil twilight was at 5:10 AM. The conditions you describe would have had to have been about 5:15-5:30 AM. Check sunrisesunset dot com for sunrise at specific dates and places.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 2 . 7/12/2016
There are several Floo connections to Hogwarts. Lucius needs to specify which one.
Camros - an organic eatery in Toronto; also the Welsh spelling of a town in Wales, means "crooked or "broken moor". Camros Potion violates one of the restrictions of magic in the Harry Potter Universe, but I'm sure you don't care.
I take it that James is raised as well, but how does he share blood with Voldemort? Oh, right. He tasted James' blood after he killed him.
| GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 1 . 7/12/2016
Elecebra? With all the canon spells available you choose an incantation that a websearch shows is the name of a scat-eating porn star? (No, I didn't look at such disgusting stuff.)
Discutissium? Completely meaningless, but sounds about as dangerous as a discussion or symposium about tissue.
James specialty is transfiguration. I recommend that in any duel he makes conspicuous use of transfiguration. See McGonagall's and Dumbledore's duels for inspiration.
There really needs to be a reason (e.g. multiple Death Eaters) why Lily runs upstairs with Harry instead of out the back door. James' work is futile if she doesn't try to get out of the house. James and Lily are experienced Order fighters. They know that Apparition and Portkeys are likely to be warded against by Voldemort even before he enters the house. It makes no sense for her to run to the upstairs nursery if it's a known dead end.
| F13rc3D3ity chapter 24 . 6/1/2016
I love your story. It's so emotionally charged. I'm literately crying right now. Me a stone cold person crying over a fanfic. I haven't been like this since that story where Harry was raised by the dark lord and in the scene when Harry found Voldemort kept a pebble that was given to him years ago. I most likely didn't explain that well but you get what I mean. I love this story. I hope we get some Hogwarts adventures with Harry in this.
| andjelija.nenic chapter 2 . 4/28/2016
Update more chapters about this story,because it's the best,extra and the great story that I was reading about it,and I am also starting to love and to like reading to this story. So can you please write more chapters,because I want to know what happens in the next chapters about it. THANKS SO MUCH FOR WRITTEN TO THIS STORY,thanks so much about it.&&&£££%%%$$$
| uh chapter 1 . 3/12/2016
OH MY GOD I CRIED AT THE FIRST CHAPTER WHEN JAMES DIED THIS IS REALLY WELL WRITTEN AND JAMES BABY!
| Racaiaeru chapter 1 . 12/24/2015
Hey there! I know I'm a little late to the game here, but do you have another link for the revised version of this story? I haven't been able to track it down anywhere. I enjoyed reading this one and I'd like to take a look at the newer one!