Reviews for Have You Ever |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I prefer the twist ending. I'm content with how you wrote it too, I expected worse from how you described it in the author's note but I loved it. This has to be one of my favorite Tomione stories. Now I need to find another to read so I'm going to check if you have more. |
![]() ![]() This just shows that bitch was an attention whore even back in 2005. |
![]() ![]() This story confused me, not in the can't-follow-the-storyline way that some fanfictions tend toward, but more in the why on earth would anyone spend so much time and effort putting together such a complex plot only to put the better ending unfinished as an afterthought? Clearly the concept was elaborate and well done, yet the execution was poor. This story had so much wasted potential. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The curse is a fun twist |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oooo that’s fun psychic Hermione to the rescue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Masquerading as Egyptians didn’t age well sadly. |
![]() ![]() ![]() See the rewritten story here: s/7947301/1/Have_You_Ever_by_Lady_Moonglow_REVISED_EDITION I loved this story. I found myself immersed in it for three nights in a row! I loke the original idea: nobody is born evil, and I liked the well-explained time travel paradox. The story is a long one and it grow slowly. Psychologically, I think that it is very well built. I kept thinking about the story and it appeared in my dreams. The, re-reading I absentmindedly started to correct a mistake here, typo there... That lead to a long process: I had the story on my laptop and whenever I could, I would return to it. I was travelling and in a hotel room at night I was thinking if Hermione would use a baseball-related expression. I decided that she would not. I browsed the web for differencies between British English and US English. I found synonyms for the word "smirk" and decided that it would not be characteristic of Hermione to say "Oh my God" repeteadly. I learned a new word, "ephitet". I felt like a gardener weeding a flower bed! After a several months' work I published a revised version of the story. I think that it is much more coherent and more readable than the original one. The story is still the same but the text has been polished a lot. Please review my revised edition if you enjoyed it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wonder how many gifts poor orphan Tom Riddle ever received in his life |
![]() ![]() ![]() How am I feeling badly for Lord Voldemort being left out lmao |
![]() ![]() ahhh this book omg i fell inlove i hate to have to part with it :( but i cant reread it. |
![]() ![]() hermoine and tom better makeit smh... |
![]() ![]() do all of them look egyption also hermoine doesnt need to be dark egyptions come in many colors |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this plot. The ideas and concepts are fascinating, and your writing has wonderful potential! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for posting these notes, they were definitely worthwhile :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you, though, for every bit of extra story. Thanks for the notes. |