|Reviews for Harry Potter, The Heir Of Magic|
| Danterevan chapter 11 . 5/13/2013
well i saw it coming but it still irks me as i was seeing this had major potential if possible id like to read the drafts you have for the rest of the story i might like to give it a go myself
hopefully you get this
| danbear chapter 11 . 3/16/2013
do you know if any one has adopted the story
| kelwin chapter 11 . 11/28/2012
good fic. do you know if anyone took it over as would be very interested in it.
| Ranmaleopard chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
this is really awesome and interesting i can't wait to see what happens next please continue!
| Lilium chapter 3 . 7/12/2012
Veela bonding: during sunset they must dance around a fire stone while 2 older veela (1fem 1male) in the veelas family chant a bonding spell
vampire bonding: if only one is a vamp(fangs) the vampire must bite the person they are bonding 2 then inject a tiny bit of venom into them mixed with blood
| Luke Dragneel chapter 11 . 3/14/2012
I am sorry to read that you abandoned this story completely, as I for one think it had a good plot line, it was just a little jumpy here and there. I would like to give you some advice about this story: Take some of your major plots and make a new story using them. I liked the idea with Bella and Cissy, you where headed in the right direction you just forgot that the deep end doesn't have floaties. What I am trying to say is that even though you have abandoned this story, don't abandoned the plot schemes or ideas that you got from this story, just perfect them so that you can make them mesh without having it blow up in your face.
| Elvin Master Assassin chapter 11 . 12/20/2011
Ae you going to post somthing if its adopted?
| Sean Malloy-1 chapter 11 . 7/24/2011
Just delete this then.
| fanofmany chapter 11 . 5/15/2011
| Moongirl1012 chapter 11 . 1/23/2011
Will you let me know who adopts this story. I'm hanging on the edge of suspense here. Practically dying!
| Lerris chapter 5 . 10/18/2010
Well a harem is usually a minus story wise, since they usually seem far to easy to be realistic. The other point I noticed is you need to be a bit more subtle. For instance the book could have said, "It is important to avoid any kind of mental attacks during the early stages of learning occlumency since they destroy the foundation you are building," rather than the more obvious reference to Snape.
| WhiteElfElder chapter 11 . 9/21/2010
Too bad you abandoned this story, it was going good.
| Ralmidaz chapter 11 . 9/9/2010
Shame its abandoned
so long and thanks for all the fish
| omh666 chapter 10 . 8/27/2010
First I'm guessing that it's Bella on the other side of the door. Second I had a question to ask but didn't like asking it in a review with nothing else in said review. If Harry's room is able to do that time delay thing and the book he is using for training does that time delay thing. Then can they both be activated to give him a compound time delay?
| els2010 chapter 11 . 6/7/2010
Ah come on wats with the cliffie no fair
real good story though so far
I hope u continue it
els2010 out ]