Reviews for Harry Potter, The Heir Of Magic |
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Ron chapter 10 . 2/5/2006 You really need to continue this one. Good story, very few grammatical errors, and a wonderful storyline/plot. Only real criticism is that you might want to spend a little more time and effort developing your characters. EX: Bellatrix. You've said she was under control, maybe a little more background to that, explain how the control led to her apparent insanity, that king of thing. Good luck, and if you would like, I can help with going over your ms. and possibly helping with spelling, grammar, and continuity. |
Malaysianprimeminister chapter 10 . 2/4/2006 i really like a lot of your ideas in this fic update it soon i will be looking forward to reading another chapter |
hp fan 31 chapter 10 . 2/2/2006 one of the best stories i have read on this. Please do not abandon it. |
RedPhoenix1 chapter 10 . 1/31/2006 This story is just what I needed to read right now. The last few fics that I read have all had these deep, convoluted, and long-winded plots that made the stories a little hard to enjoy. It also has DDbahsing and RWbashing which I've found recently that I really enjoy reading, especially after rereading books 4,5, and 6 not too long ago. Books 4&6 got me thinking of the character of Ron and how much he doesn't act like a friend to Harry a lot of the time. Take that and the relationship that JKR has forced btwn Ron and Hermione. No matter how many anvil sized clues she left to suggest this would happen the character dynamics that made their way into the books lead more toward a Harry&Hermione pairing or at least a very strong bond between them. Ron is more of a supporting character within the trio. TO me he feels more like he was written in just to make sure that Harry has a male friend. Oops, got on rant there and couldn't stop typing. Sorry about that. Although the story can be more descriptive at times, such as body positioning and movements in relation to the surroundings (this helps in visualizing the scenes almost like watching a movie), I find the story to be quite entertaining ... Ron seemingly pranking Dumbledore...LOL... and has some potentially interesting character interactions. I know that you wrote that you already have the wives figured out but I am hoping that the four are Luna, Hermione, Tonks, and maybe Ginny or even Susan Bones. I don't see Harry being able to forgive Narcissa or Bellatrix that much that he would marry them. For them I can see him eventually trusting them to becoming his advisors in Black family matters which could then lead to friendship. You would have to change the first 5 books too much to make marriage believable, to me at least. Anyway, I seriously hope that you haven't abandoned this fic as so many others have done. You have a really good start to what would make a really great story. Longing for an update, RedPhoenix1 |
JP chapter 10 . 1/29/2006 Love your story. Please do not abandon like so many others. |
v v chapter 10 . 1/28/2006 nice fic. i am quite interested in harry's non-human magical inheritances. i like that you are starting harry at the beginning. he might end up being uber powerful, but he still has to start from scratch. the mind fort idea is cool. is snape going to be a "good" guy that's been/being controlled be dumbledore? maybe harry could teach the layering to snape so he changes personality a bit after not having to relive bad memories every other day. can't wait to see what surprises are in sirius' will. should make dumbledore mad. YES! hahahahaha... i love it when DD gets his. if harry can dissolve narcissa's marriage, can he also dissolve bellatrix'? my vote for wives are narcissa, bellatrix, luna, tonks, and fleur. just think of the political power he could have with narcissa. i like the older women idea with harry because he's seen so much the younger ones just seem to childish. |
wwwendy chapter 7 . 1/27/2006 Okay, I'm hoping that Hermione told him about what happened last summer regarding AD & the order...PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE...now I'm gonna hit the little blue arrow & read chapter 8...I'm so glad I don't have to wait for that chapter... |
Autumn's-Day chapter 10 . 1/21/2006 luv ur story!cant wait for an update |
DragonFoxx chapter 10 . 1/17/2006 Please update. Even if it is a short chapter. It has been months and I can assume that I am not the only one anxcious for more. Your stroy is great. Very captivating. I hope to see more soon. |
Shiroi Uso chapter 10 . 1/14/2006 O.o Did you leave this story! |
Sara chapter 10 . 1/13/2006 Please update this story soon! This is such an excellent story, please don't leave us hanging to much longer! |
Under Revision chapter 10 . 1/9/2006 Really great...can't wait to read more! |
thsunami chapter 6 . 1/6/2006 i like your story it has originaml quality to it especialy with all the women. It is a nice change of pace i do wonder if it have any gages of sexual and comical sense of the women with his affection of course just the right amount because if it's to much tenchi then it won't work especially your stly of the story has a deep sense of respect angst and emotion. A very good read |
thsunami chapter 10 . 1/6/2006 it is a most interesting story with it's own unqie feel to the harry books uiniverse i truly hope that this story will be concluded as i much injoy your perspective on the subject matter. May inspiration ran on your mind never leaving from you |
Mia from Haven chapter 10 . 1/4/2006 When are you going to update next? Mia |